Pearl Jam Haiku Challenge

DangDang
DangDang Posts: 1,551
edited August 2012 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
(Three-lined short poem/verse, 17 total syllables, (metered 5-7-5) and about Pearl Jam song or something)

I have a grievance
All those yesterdays are gone
And no picture kept
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  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    Off he goes again
    Riding west along the track
    The track is a mystery
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • NoOne'sRival
    NoOne'sRival Posts: 299
    Last stop on the west coast line
    Wheel will be turning right, then straight
    Steer us toward the clear
    "Dream the dream others then...you will be no one's RIVAL!"
    "Doo do do do doo do doo, Doo do do do doo do doo..."
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    He's been In Hiding
    A Dissident when he's here
    Long Road unwinding
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Mike, Matt. Jeff and Stone
    Ponder the shadows with Ed
    The Low Light has grown
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    He's going hungry
    Still Alive but underfed
    Starved won't eat their bread

    ***********************************
    Daughter waits no more
    This was never meant for you
    She knows who it's for

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  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Bomb in the temple
    Once Evenflow spreads the load
    It's time to explode
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Live with Animal
    Big Wave up at Breakerfall
    More bricks in the wall
  • DangDang
    DangDang Posts: 1,551
    At start of long road
    I did what I had to do
    Obey rusted signs
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Just a Bush Leaguer
    His thought process was meager
    Lying deceiter

    **********************************

    Off He Goes each day
    He knows he's her Betterman
    She still goes away
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Spin The Black Circle
    Needle sharp as a pencil
    Last Exit spectral

    *****************************

    Ignoring the pain
    Slip Kid out for a Whipping
    Gets wet in the rain

    *******************************

    He's Given To Fly
    Feels only Indifference
    Still doesn't know why

    ******************************

    Spin The Black Circle
    Don't look for the Last Exit
    Try to forget it

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  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    Looks like we have a clear winner....
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Richard E then Black
    Hail Hail dawn of the New God
    Pushin' Forward Back

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    When It's Just A Book
    The young man wanted to know
    What The Fuck Is Up

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  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Cigarette Habit
    Gasping smoked air that's impure
    One Breath is not sure
  • Thoughts_Arrive
    Thoughts_Arrive Melbourne, Australia Posts: 15,165
    I saaaaid...It looks like we have a clear winner :lol:
    Adelaide 17/11/2009, Melbourne 20/11/2009, Sydney 22/11/2009, Melbourne (Big Day Out Festival) 24/01/2014
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Wishlist for some peace
    See what the Oceans Release
    Then they Drop The Leash

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    Elderly Woman
    Wouldn't say her former self
    Before she said shelf
  • CHANGEinWAVES
    CHANGEinWAVES Posts: 10,169
    SD533 wrote:
    Wishlist for some peace
    See what the Oceans Release
    Then they Drop The Leash
    awesome!
    "I'm not present, I'm a drug that makes you dream"
  • DangDang
    DangDang Posts: 1,551
    edited May 2009
    SD533 wrote:
    Elderly Woman
    Wouldn't say her former self
    Before she said shelf

    I know. What a way to SQUEEZE it in there, Eddie.
    Post edited by DangDang on
  • DangDang
    DangDang Posts: 1,551
    Wait since '98.....................
    Haiku-challenged? :ugeek: who? says me!
    seven one percent
  • SD533
    SD533 Posts: 221
    Red Mosquito fed
    Hover crafting Satan's Bed
    Gorged on Blood not bled
  • DangDang
    DangDang Posts: 1,551
    Go to "Moving Train"
    "You are brilliant and the earth......"
    Read it and go Wow.

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