a poem/song thing....

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  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Right...I'm off out to do some work, but here's a thought:

    I enjoy reasoned, thoughtful discussion and I shall try to turn our quibble into something positive.

    "Prostate Guy": Define "blunt" poetry as opposed to "creative poetry." Let's make this fun: You can't use the following adjectives in your debate: "pretentious", "bogus", "shit", "crap"; or such terms as "reality" or "what's under your nose". You have to give us a working, positive definition of poetry as you prefer it, and even better, you could give us one of your lyrics or poems to read. We shan't be rude or injudicious about it.

    But do it on another thread. This is ILP's thread, after all! :)
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by i_love_pirhanas
    you didn't know
    that i could shout
    that i could scream
    that my eyes can flash
    like the light sparking off a blade
    that is a glare cutting through
    you.
    you didnt know.

    you didn't know
    that i have many faces
    that i have many colours
    that i can change
    like the sea moving around itself
    that is me engulfing
    you.
    you didnt know.

    and you still don't know
    and you still can't see
    what lies behind my bright smile
    what lingers underneath my footsteps
    like the music that makes me dance
    so many layers
    that you don't know at all.

    This is just to remind everyone of this good poem.

    :)
  • sevensins
    sevensins Posts: 887
    well me, i happen to like this.......it's got flow......a groove if i do say so myself, but i cant hear it so fuck it..............it pretty good
    http://www.myspace.com/pleasetryagain

    http://www.myspace.com/alotalotbetweenus
  • i_love_pirhanas
    i_love_pirhanas Posts: 35
    thanks for comments everyone..and for turning it into a discussion about rainbows that i didnt really understand (sorry)
    maybe tis common or something but i've only written about 5 things ever, i'm not really a poet but sometimes something comes out....like this....
    Spatula
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I didn't understand the discussion about rainbows either! :D
    Great poem...keep them coming!

    :)

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