a poem/song thing....

FinsburyParkCarrots

Right...I'm off out to do some work, but here's a thought:

I enjoy reasoned, thoughtful discussion and I shall try to turn our quibble into something positive.

"Prostate Guy": Define "blunt" poetry as opposed to "creative poetry." Let's make this fun: You can't use the following adjectives in your debate: "pretentious", "bogus", "shit", "crap"; or such terms as "reality" or "what's under your nose". You have to give us a working, positive definition of poetry as you prefer it, and even better, you could give us one of your lyrics or poems to read. We shan't be rude or injudicious about it.

But do it on another thread. This is ILP's thread, after all!

FinsburyParkCarrots

Originally posted by i_love_pirhanas
you didn't know
that i could shout
that i could scream
that my eyes can flash
like the light sparking off a blade
that is a glare cutting through
you.
you didnt know.

you didn't know
that i have many faces
that i have many colours
that i can change
like the sea moving around itself
that is me engulfing
you.
you didnt know.

and you still don't know
and you still can't see
what lies behind my bright smile
what lingers underneath my footsteps
like the music that makes me dance
so many layers
that you don't know at all.

This is just to remind everyone of this good poem.

sevensins

well me, i happen to like this.......it's got flow......a groove if i do say so myself, but i cant hear it so fuck it..............it pretty good

i_love_pirhanas

thanks for comments everyone..and for turning it into a discussion about rainbows that i didnt really understand (sorry)
maybe tis common or something but i've only written about 5 things ever, i'm not really a poet but sometimes something comes out....like this....

FinsburyParkCarrots

I didn't understand the discussion about rainbows either!
Great poem...keep them coming!