a poem/song thing....

i_love_pirhanas

you didn't know
that i could shout
that i could scream
that my eyes can flash
like the light sparking off a blade
that is a glare cutting through
you.
you didnt know.

you didn't know
that i have many faces
that i have many colours
that i can change
like the sea moving around itself
that is me engulfing
you.
you didnt know.

and you still don't know
and you still can't see
what lies behind my bright smile
what lingers underneath my footsteps
like the music that makes me dance
so many layers
that you don't know at all.

browneyedgrl

that's amazing:)

Rayne

Amazingly expressive. This is so similar to the way I write...one day I will have the guts to share with y'all. In the mean time, thanks for sharing this part of yourself. It's a gift.

i_love_pirhanas

aaaaaaaaaaahh *blushes*

thankyou

Prostate Guy

I didn't like it...It's much too common. Which isn't a bad thing, but this is just tooooo common, nothing really stands out.

FinsburyParkCarrots

Originally posted by Prostate Guy
I didn't like it...It's much too common. Which isn't a bad thing, but this is just tooooo common, nothing really stands out.

"O mother
Grass, mother me the poet's faculty
Of loving to the heart of any ordinary thing,
Sitting there by the cool Pierian spring:
Where on the Strand the horses gallop -
a commonplace sight."

Patrick Kavanagh (1904-67)

Exodus

i liked it, myself....
especially the first paragraph....
that thing about the knife was GREAT.

mulac

yeah i thought it was pretty cool.

good job

Prostate Guy

Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
"O mother
Grass, mother me the poet's faculty
Of loving to the heart of any ordinary thing,
Sitting there by the cool Pierian spring:
Where on the Strand the horses gallop -
a commonplace sight."

Patrick Kavanagh (1904-67)

I think the commonplace should have a few exotic looking plants...that's all.

FinsburyParkCarrots

I dunno...."Madame Bovary" makes art out of the mundane, the provincial and the hapless....why do things need to be exotic?

Discuss!

Exodus

can't have the sweet without the sour...

not saying this one was sour... but if everything was exceptional then nothing would seem extrodinary.

FinsburyParkCarrots

Originally posted by Exodus
...but if everything was exceptional then nothing would seem extraordinary.

I love synonyms.

Prostate Guy

Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
I dunno...."Madame Bovary" makes art out of the mundane, the provincial and the hapless....why do things need to be exotic?

Discuss!

Would a rainbow be as intriging if it was just one color?

Prostate Guy

Originally posted by Exodus
can't have the sweet without the sour...

not saying this one was sour... but if everything was exceptional then nothing would seem extrodinary.

Hey fuck, that was a good line.

But then again..If everything was extrodinary then god would be shit out of luck.

FinsburyParkCarrots

Originally posted by Prostate Guy
Would a rainbow be as intriging if it was just one color?

How do you know it isn't white? Don't quote your "well, I was in the classroom and we had this prism" story......the light is only refractive if you're ready to see it refract.

Could be black.....

Prostate Guy

Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
How do you know it isn't white? Don't quote your "well, I was in the classroom and we had this prism" story......the light is only refractive if you're ready to see it refract.

Could be black.....

Don't get all bogus philosophy on me. Do you see white or do you see a fucking rainbow?

Prostate Guy

Oh and there was this one time when I was in the class and we got this prism...

FinsburyParkCarrots

When you look at the sky, do you see white or a rainbow, BEFORE the sky makes a class out of glass itself and shows its spectral spread through a prism?

What's the difference between real and bogus philosophy? What is the honourable pursuit of wisdom? What is sophistry?

Prostate Guy

Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
When you look at the sky, do you see white or a rainbow, BEFORE the sky makes a class out of glass itself and shows its spectral spread through a prism?

What's the difference between real and bogus philosophy? What is the honourable pursuit of wisdom? What is sophistry?

No offense....But this was about blunt vs. "creative" poetry.


But to answer your question...You can't see light, so what the hell do you care?

Wisdom is life itself, and the pursuit comes when you go....kinky eh?

Sophistry is exclaiming you've found a truth you know you'll never get

Now shut the fuck up with this philosophy crap....please?

FinsburyParkCarrots

Philosophy is "crap".

The answer's in play-doh......

FinsburyParkCarrots

Originally posted by Prostate Guy

Sophistry is exclaiming you've found a truth you know you'll never get

Wrong definition of sophistry. In fact, the nature of the statement was a prime example of sophistry in itself.