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mookie9999mookie9999 Posts: 4,677
edited April 2010 in All Encompassing Trip
So here is a video of me taken last night performing stand-up in NYC. Keep in mind a couple of things. First, it's only the 4th time I've done this. Second, I had a "bit" of liquid courage in me. Third, and most importantly, the crowd is made up of stand-up comics trying out new material and a few scattered guests. One of these guests came with me and before I went up heckled a couple of the comedians to my utter disbelief and horror. So to say the crowd didn't love me would be an understatement! Feel free to provide feedback (yes I know that I speak too fast and when I've consumed a bottle of wine in under an hour I have quite a lisp!) Positive and negative comments are welcome! Without further adieu:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RwtQ9W2VZk4
"The leads are weak!"

"The leads are weak? Fuckin' leads are weak? You're Weak! I've Been in this business 15 years"

"What's your name?"

"FUCK YOU! THAT"S MY NAME!"
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  • pjfan31pjfan31 Posts: 7,335
    The news story one was a little too long. Though I thought the ESPN one was good, though it does need a bit of polishing.

    Good luck mate, keep persisting.
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  • arqarq Posts: 8,049
    I liked, it remind me of woody allen, see a couple of his movies and try to use like that nervous feeling that you transmit, believe all this in a good way, i repeat you i liked.

    good work brother :D
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  • mookie9999mookie9999 Posts: 4,677
    arq wrote:
    I liked, it remind me of woody allen, see a couple of his movies and try to use like that nervous feeling that you transmit, believe all this in a good way, i repeat you i liked.

    good work brother :D

    Thanks! I'm actually a huge Woody Allen fan, except my nervousness isn't an act! I can see what you're saying and will work on it! Also, thanks to pjfan31 for the feedback!
    "The leads are weak!"

    "The leads are weak? Fuckin' leads are weak? You're Weak! I've Been in this business 15 years"

    "What's your name?"

    "FUCK YOU! THAT"S MY NAME!"
  • Gary CarterGary Carter Posts: 14,067
    dude i love it. i think you spoke to fast cause you were nervous, other then that it had me laughing. also i fully agree with what you had to say bout espn.
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  • mookie9999mookie9999 Posts: 4,677
    metsfan wrote:
    dude i love it. i think you spoke to fast cause you were nervous, other then that it had me laughing. also i fully agree with what you had to say bout espn.
    Thanks! My nerves definitely got the best of me. Not to mention I was rattled by the heckling incident and the fact that I was under the impression that I would have 5 minutes to perform only to find out after arriving that I had to cut it down to 3 so that the last two could be reserved for feedback. Glad you liked it!
    "The leads are weak!"

    "The leads are weak? Fuckin' leads are weak? You're Weak! I've Been in this business 15 years"

    "What's your name?"

    "FUCK YOU! THAT"S MY NAME!"
  • Gary CarterGary Carter Posts: 14,067
    mookie9999 wrote:
    Thanks! My nerves definitely got the best of me. Not to mention I was rattled by the heckling incident and the fact that I was under the impression that I would have 5 minutes to perform only to find out after arriving that I had to cut it down to 3 so that the last two could be reserved for feedback. Glad you liked it!
    welcome mookie
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  • sweet adelinesweet adeline Posts: 2,191
    i thought it was good, i give you props just for getting up there, its gotta be tough. i agree with most of the feedback they gave you in the video, esp. the transition between "man rapes 7" and "where to take your date for valentines day".
  • xavier mcdanielxavier mcdaniel Somewhere in NYC Posts: 9,321
    nice work, the kobe bryant bit on the taxi crawl was funny and had a good delivery.
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  • FifthelementFifthelement Lotusland Posts: 6,963
    Props to you for putting yourself out there. :D I thought that your delivery was very good, but I agree with those in the audience regarding the order of your points and tightening up your anecdotes. Excellent job, keep the clips coming :P Oh . . . and leave your heckling friend at home next time :o
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  • Heineken HelenHeineken Helen Posts: 18,095
    Fifthelement wrote:
    Props to you for putting yourself out there. :D I thought that your delivery was very good, but I agree with those in the audience regarding the order of your points and tightening up your anecdotes. Excellent job, keep the clips coming :P Oh . . . and leave your heckling friend at home next time :o
    I agree... oh and you looked like a natural, and you sounded very comfortable. Good job!
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  • Steve DunneSteve Dunne Posts: 4,965
    nice work there jason! keep at it!
    I love to turn you on
  • mca47mca47 Posts: 13,301
    Booooooooo! Get off the stage!

    :D
    Hahaha, just kidding! Good work.
  • Prioronfire22Prioronfire22 Posts: 393
    I thought that was really good man. I didn't understand why the crowd seemed so silent. I was laughing at pretty much everything. I loved the espn joke I'm probably gonna steal that from you today and use that with my friends :D . In all honesty I think you do have potential, I would never be able to do that I can't even get up in front of my college class and introduce myself without turning my stomach inside out. Good work! keep it up, and I cant wait to see more
  • CJMST3KCJMST3K Posts: 9,722
    Great eye contact. I may recommend (for what it's worth) going with less obvious finishes to jokes. Like the hair clippings one. How about:

    "...but I mailed them to my girlfriend, and spent the rest of the month in a jail cell getting to know a guy named "Ram". ...and you don't wanna know how he got HIS name"


    Or instead of "Poker... can anyone tell me when poker became a sport?" how about:

    "Poker... can you tell me the last time you saw someone wearing a helmet and goggles to a poker table? (pause) ...because when I wore it, I felt overdressed. People looked at me like I just got off the short-bus. I respectfully submit that poker is NOT a sport, because it's the ONLY sport you can gain weight while playing. Well... that and bowling."


    I dunno. Just thoughts. Best of luck though! :)
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  • AmentsChickAmentsChick Posts: 6,969
    A) You're from California??? I didn't know that! What part?

    B) I, too, am obsessed with the tvs in cabs in NYC. I want to take cabs in NYC just because of the tvs.

    C) Poker isn't a sport...I SOOOOOOOOOO agree with you.
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  • PoncierPoncier Posts: 17,265
    Definitely some promising material.
    Props for giving it a go, best of luck.
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  • AmentsChickAmentsChick Posts: 6,969
    Poncier wrote:
    Definitely some promising material.
    Props for giving it a go, best of luck.

    Ponc, when are you doing yours?? You'd kick ass in a LOST-related gig.
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  • Kilgore_TroutKilgore_Trout Posts: 7,334
    my cousin just got a start in the standup biz within the last couple years and hes just now really getting into a good rhythm... hes always been VERY naturally funny but you gotta perfect your material over time and the big thing is learning how to respond to the audience... interact with them, gauge how theyre feeling, show them that you're capable of off-the-cuff recoveries... it all comes down to watching and learning from the masters... try not to watch comics that are too similar to your own style cause you might find yourself accidentally picking up habits and delivery... you got a good start though! give it another 100 shows... if you still have to drink at that point to work up the courage to do it then id say its not right for you... you gotta keep your mind and wit sharp or else it'll all come off as scripted

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  • LizardLizard So Cal Posts: 12,091
    You did good.....

    you are quite brave!!!
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  • josevolutionjosevolution Posts: 30,394
    hey mooks all the best may you brake a leg next time, you did fine you deserve a ton of credit :mrgreen: cheers bro .....
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  • Drop The Leash 10Drop The Leash 10 Posts: 7,011
    nice :D

    lmao at the kobe bryant one. :mrgreen:
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  • dunkmandunkman Posts: 19,646
    i have to give you mucho credito for getting up there and doing it amigo..

    i disagree with one of the audience comments that the taxi cab tv bit had to go... if thats where you noticed the news feed most likely so why not use it? other than that i have no idea who Kobe Bryant is, but it was still a good joke... i like exaggeration in comedy and you could maybe go further with that... where you said about the diamond and "rape any 3 girls without prosecution" you could maybe go more into it and make it appear to be an extra long news feed that is hugely in-depth (something i think one of the hardened cynical audience guys said with the "$3.4324423 dollar contract" etc.. ) but well done my friend!!

    but keep going at it mooks.. and keep us updated with more videos?
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  • sweet adelinesweet adeline Posts: 2,191
    AmentsChick wrote:
    A) You're from California??? I didn't know that! What part?

    B) I, too, am obsessed with the tvs in cabs in NYC. I want to take cabs in NYC just because of the tvs.

    C) Poker isn't a sport...I SOOOOOOOOOO agree with you.

    poker is a sport. so is golf. i play both, therefore they are sports ;)
  • mookie9999mookie9999 Posts: 4,677
    Thanks for all of the replies and feedback! I will take it all into consideration and definitely keep posting videos!
    "The leads are weak!"

    "The leads are weak? Fuckin' leads are weak? You're Weak! I've Been in this business 15 years"

    "What's your name?"

    "FUCK YOU! THAT"S MY NAME!"
  • rival.rival. Chicago Posts: 7,775
    good work man! i like your swipe at jersey.

    keep it up. give you a ton of credit for going up there. something i could never do.
  • mookie9999mookie9999 Posts: 4,677
    I know that it's insanely short notice, but anyone in the nyc area wanting to see me perform tonight should go to 330 5th ave in the basement of Maui Tacos (damn right I'm in the big leagues now!) as I will be performing sometime between 8 and 10. It's free to watch. All of the material will be different from my posted video.
    "The leads are weak!"

    "The leads are weak? Fuckin' leads are weak? You're Weak! I've Been in this business 15 years"

    "What's your name?"

    "FUCK YOU! THAT"S MY NAME!"
  • xavier mcdanielxavier mcdaniel Somewhere in NYC Posts: 9,321
    mookie9999 wrote:
    I know that it's insanely short notice, but anyone in the nyc area wanting to see me perform tonight should go to 330 5th ave in the basement of Maui Tacos (damn right I'm in the big leagues now!) as I will be performing sometime between 8 and 10. It's free to watch. All of the material will be different from my posted video.

    i didn't know they had comedy there. i remember good food but slow service though.
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  • CreedDiseaseCreedDisease Posts: 241
    Hahahahaha! Every Show is Poker Now... that was good... I thought you had a very good delivery, but the jokes need to be a little more... edgy is probably not the right word, but it's the first that comes to mind. Either way, keep up the good work!
  • restlesssoulrestlesssoul Posts: 6,951
    ESPN - EVERY SHOW IS POKER NOW

    that was funny man. good for you. i have written stand up before too. that is a really cool atmosphere you are in, where you can be critiqued by fellow comedians after the show. great little forum, very useful stuff.

    keep trying and writing material!! good job.
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  • rriversrrivers Posts: 3,698
    Thanks for posting, mookie. I thought the best joke was "Every Show is Poker Now" too. I too give you props for getting up there. I didn't think you came off as that nervous and your delivery wasn't bad. It will take time so I think you are doing the right thing in going up as often as you can.
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