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Ms. Haiku

For New Year's I decided on 1-2-3

Submit 1 manuscript to a chapbook publisher
Submit poetry to 2 magazines
Submit poetry to 3 poetry contests.

I guess I have to get started, eh?

chadwick

Ms. Haiku wrote:

Could you give me an example? Do you mean trade off this site or on the site? I've posted here before I just haven't put pen to poetry in a while.

The photograph book I feature in today's coffee post on my cookieempress blog is very inspirational. When I look at winding stairs in towns of stones of Greece or Italy, and I listen to Flamenco music I think of lemons and sunlight, and the piercing brilliance of sharp thoughts. Needs a little more intuition, but clarity is a start. Here is the one I wrote over 3 years ago

http://inspiredpoetrysubmission.blogspot.com/2007/06/inspired-by-paco-pena-cd-azahara.html

i never read or wrote a Haiku, to my knowledge anyways.
what i was saying is, show me how.
i just let it go/flow, no rules or boundary to speak of.

just something that feels good, is why i write, feels like an implosion.
always striving, searching internaly/internally for ingnition.

chadwick

chadwick wrote:

i never read or wrote a Haiku, to my knowledge anyways.
what i was saying is, show me how.
i just let it go/flow, no rules or boundary to speak of.

just something that feels good, is why i write, feels like an implosion.
always striving, searching internaly/internally for ingnition.

this shit owns me.

Ms. Haiku

chadwick wrote:

i never read or wrote a Haiku, to my knowledge anyways.
what i was saying is, show me how.
i just let it go/flow, no rules or boundary to speak of.

just something that feels good, is why i write, feels like an implosion.
always striving, searching internaly/internally for ingnition.

As far as haiku I may be the best person to ask, and at the same time the worst person to ask. The best because I studied it for years just looking for the Aha! moment. The worst because I don't believe in the
5 syllable/7 syllable/5 syllable math lesson structure that English speakers are taught. From a post on this forum a few years ago, someone noted how haiku is marked as
5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables in the dictionary. I wrote that the dictionary was wrong

First and foremost haiku encompasses two views; short view and long view. Long view should contain a reference to "the bigger picture" of the moment. In many cases it is a reference to the season. How I teach the short view is that it's what can be seen within 100 ft. So, look near and look far, and see the discrepancy. The fact that it is even though it may not make sense creates the Aha! For instance, say in April there is a snow storm. However, the day before a bicyle was left in the backyard because it was Spring weather. To write a haiku about it could be written as:

broken bicyle rack carries snow
Easter decorations

This implies snowstorm, bit it implies the discrepancy as Easter decorations are up. This is a good place to start http://www.hsa-haiku.org/frogpond.htm


It is not courtly poetry. It is simple, and raw. Yet, sometimes a moment, which is what the haiku is after, is so brilliant in understanding that it's like the sun took residence in my eyes.

To work on it I'd start by this:

Write a short poem between 9-15 syllables, between 2-3 lines, and include a short view, and a long view. See what happens, and go from there. I've read good 2 line haiku, but I haven't read any good 1 line haiku.

Haiku was first an opening for a long poem created by a group of people. Haiku was originally from Japan, and the syllable restriction translated into 5/7/5 in English. However, Japanese language has syllables for sounds that aren't included in English. If you want structure similar to the 5/7/5 structure I would suggest 2 stressed syllables/3 stressed syllables/2 stressed sylllables.

Ms. Haiku

There are some incredible haiku in http://forums.pearljam.com/showthread.php?t=95954&highlight=haiku.

I asked the writers if they would let me write the poems out and send it to PJ as a gift. It was a little black canvas hardcover book. Pretty cool.

chadwick

Ms. Haiku wrote:

As far as haiku I may be the best person to ask, and at the same time the worst person to ask. The best because I studied it for years just looking for the Aha! moment. The worst because I don't believe in the
5 syllable/7 syllable/5 syllable math lesson structure that English speakers are taught. From a post on this forum a few years ago, someone noted how haiku is marked as
5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables in the dictionary. I wrote that the dictionary was wrong

First and foremost haiku encompasses two views; short view and long view. Long view should contain a reference to "the bigger picture" of the moment. In many cases it is a reference to the season. How I teach the short view is that it's what can be seen within 100 ft. So, look near and look far, and see the discrepancy. The fact that it is even though it may not make sense creates the Aha! For instance, say in April there is a snow storm. However, the day before a bicyle was left in the backyard because it was Spring weather. To write a haiku about it could be written as:

broken bicyle rack carries snow
Easter decorations

This implies snowstorm, bit it implies the discrepancy as Easter decorations are up. This is a good place to start http://www.hsa-haiku.org/frogpond.htm


It is not courtly poetry. It is simple, and raw. Yet, sometimes a moment, which is what the haiku is after, is so brilliant in understanding that it's like the sun took residence in my eyes.

To work on it I'd start by this:

Write a short poem between 9-15 syllables, between 2-3 lines, and include a short view, and a long view. See what happens, and go from there. I've read good 2 line haiku, but I haven't read any good 1 line haiku.

Haiku was first an opening for a long poem created by a group of people. Haiku was originally from Japan, and the syllable restriction translated into 5/7/5 in English. However, Japanese language has syllables for sounds that aren't included in English. If you want structure similar to the 5/7/5 structure I would suggest 2 stressed syllables/3 stressed syllables/2 stressed sylllables.

my brain is mush just by lookin at this.
i just did algebra and english classes.
i'm screwed, school, i must be insane.

chadwick

Ms. Haiku wrote:

As far as haiku I may be the best person to ask, and at the same time the worst person to ask. The best because I studied it for years just looking for the Aha! moment. The worst because I don't believe in the
5 syllable/7 syllable/5 syllable math lesson structure that English speakers are taught. From a post on this forum a few years ago, someone noted how haiku is marked as
5 syllables
7 syllables
5 syllables in the dictionary. I wrote that the dictionary was wrong

First and foremost haiku encompasses two views; short view and long view. Long view should contain a reference to "the bigger picture" of the moment. In many cases it is a reference to the season. How I teach the short view is that it's what can be seen within 100 ft. So, look near and look far, and see the discrepancy. The fact that it is even though it may not make sense creates the Aha! For instance, say in April there is a snow storm. However, the day before a bicyle was left in the backyard because it was Spring weather. To write a haiku about it could be written as:

broken bicyle rack carries snow
Easter decorations

This implies snowstorm, bit it implies the discrepancy as Easter decorations are up. This is a good place to start http://www.hsa-haiku.org/frogpond.htm


It is not courtly poetry. It is simple, and raw. Yet, sometimes a moment, which is what the haiku is after, is so brilliant in understanding that it's like the sun took residence in my eyes.

To work on it I'd start by this:

Write a short poem between 9-15 syllables, between 2-3 lines, and include a short view, and a long view. See what happens, and go from there. I've read good 2 line haiku, but I haven't read any good 1 line haiku.

Haiku was first an opening for a long poem created by a group of people. Haiku was originally from Japan, and the syllable restriction translated into 5/7/5 in English. However, Japanese language has syllables for sounds that aren't included in English. If you want structure similar to the 5/7/5 structure I would suggest 2 stressed syllables/3 stressed syllables/2 stressed sylllables.

that's insane.
haha.
you're killin me here.

beat my head on walls of brick.

chadwick

broken bicyle rack carries snow
Easter decorations


rusty cars pull frozen streets
Ice races

yes?
no?

Ms. Haiku

chadwick wrote:

broken bicyle rack carries snow
Easter decorations


rusty cars pull frozen streets
Ice races

yes?
no?

Yes!

Ms. Haiku

Monday was created by a trust-fund baby!

Also, as many pleasures were created in reaction to horrific circumstances . . . chocolate was created on Tuesday

chadwick

Ms. Haiku wrote:

Monday was created by a trust-fund baby!

Also, as many pleasures were created in reaction to horrific circumstances . . . chocolate was created on Tuesday

you might just be insane
that is quite brilliant.

chadwick

i wish i were a puppy.
you'd adopt me, keep me safe.
i'd take naps with you on rainy days.
curl up to you under blankets so warm.
i'd stay next to you forever, safe and sound.

chadwick

x (3) = what the fuck
funny shit really.

Jamal

The words behind which I hide
represent the turn of tides
A whirl of emotions in this world
a world that does not feel a single thing

Keep me from harm
oh won't you please try
at least to keep me warm
close to, or better yet, inside your heart

Love me back

justam

Love says
freedom is understanding
freedom is forgiveness
freedom is giving
so let's be free
each man, each woman, be
better than we
fear

Jamal

justam wrote:

Love says
freedom is understanding
freedom is forgiveness
freedom is giving
so let's be free
each man, each woman, be
better than we
fear

Love says one thing
thinks another
Do not be fooled
mistrust is the safe approach

Do not believe a cynic's view
mistrust the mistrusting
yet be careful who you trust
and let not your heart fall victim in this life

justam

Jamal wrote:

Love says one thing
thinks another
Do not be fooled
mistrust is the safe approach

Do not believe a cynic's view
mistrust the mistrusting
yet be careful who you trust
and let not your heart fall victim in this life

LOL!

Jamal

justam wrote:

LOL!

errrm...
I liked your piece and wanted to respond in a poetic way

But I kind of meant what I wrote (it may be the whisky taling though )

risa

hmm... thoughts...

i am stranded in a cup
standing on ice
fearing that any moment now
i will be
the extension of the sea

chadwick

risa wrote:

hmm... thoughts...

i am stranded in a cup
standing on ice
fearing that any moment now
i will be
the extension of the sea

i likey.