Tell me what you think...

Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
edited December 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Vengeange is mine, the world still turns...
freedoms disappear every moment...
time to take a stand, time to waste my time...
no time to take my time.
Unaffected leaders want no part in this...
ears stopped hearing, compassion disintegrated,
it's all clear that everything's hazy...
it's all clear that things are crazy...
Voices ring out across our land...
angrily, impatience takes a stand.
Change is just around the bend,
making differences out of compromises,
taking motions from emotions,
faking it 'till our eyes bleed...
Their time will come...
but ours is NOW!
We must separate the liars,
free the inmates of change,
bring them on, bring them on...
A declaration is at hand,
down marches the lonely band,
the music searches untouched ground,
until their truths are rarely found.
PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
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  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    Part of me fell apart,
    inside out,
    or the other way around,
    hit the ground and went right through,
    crush
    shadows
    what is seen isn't fair,
    trapped in a corner,
    can't get out,
    not sure they will take it,
    sanity failing
    blank
    down the stairway,
    spinning spirals,
    winding
    finding out that there is no finding out all about what I see when I see what they can't...
    it's not me,
    numb
    don't know why,
    they wouldn't hear the calls,
    voices pleading,
    for a reason unexplained,
    there's too much,
    never enough,
    half empty or half full?
    Pushing down on my chest,
    spare a moment,
    because I can't
    have another
    one of these days,
    free my heart of all thought,
    stuck in here,
    can't get out,
    keep reaching out,
    there's no doubt,
    it's over now...
    just go away.
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • man ....i really loved these...the second one expecially...it really hit me ...thanks...its right where i am right now pretty much
    i miss you already...


  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    thanks. glad someone feels the way I do.
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    This sick sad way of showing my sorrow
    won't do a damn good tomorrow
    I'll still be sick and sad
    I'll still be worried and mad
    caring or sharing
    no sense comparing
    myself to myself
    so if I reach for the stars
    and wish upon the brightest
    will I not be left reaching?
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    Still searching in vain
    for escape from the pain
    not just for easy ways out
    selfish, insane
    worthless, mundane
    just describes this life throughout
    walk in the rain
    for escape from this pain
    and find only easy ways out.
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    How can I see the light that doesn't shine? How can I dive in another empty pool? Who cares what I'm feeling?

    Why don't I just go get a fucking life? Trade in my poor excuse and insanity to boot, along with emotions that don't help me either...

    Seems like a fair trade, since misery likes some company, thought I'd make it better, always trying to find a solution...

    Figured that if something isn't happy, I'd make it happy or set it free, wish I could do either but I just can't face it.

    Where do we go when we're cornered, when there seems there's no other way, when escaping just isn't good enough?

    We look right back inside ourselves, find what made us happy in the first place, and brace ourselves for the ride.
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,412
    Originally posted by Still Here
    How can I see the light that doesn't shine? How can I dive in another empty pool? Who cares what I'm feeling?

    Why don't I just go get a fucking life? Trade in my poor excuse and insanity to boot, along with emotions that don't help me either...

    Seems like a fair trade, since misery likes some company, thought I'd make it better, always trying to find a solution...

    Figured that if something isn't happy, I'd make it happy or set it free, wish I could do either but I just can't face it.

    Where do we go when we're cornered, when there seems there's no other way, when escaping just isn't good enough?

    We look right back inside ourselves, find what made us happy in the first place, and brace ourselves for the ride.

    I like this one.
    &&&&&&&&&&&&&&
  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    Originally posted by justam
    I like this one.

    thanx...:)
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • AmaterasuAmaterasu Posts: 317
    The way life USE TO BE...
  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    The love you took from me...:)

    great song.
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    It's all good. Nice thread. :)
  • Still HereStill Here Posts: 661
    Thanks Finsbury...but I put 'Ophelia's Nun' thread at the top of my list...:D
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • bump... (8-22-04...before "the crash")

    over the horizon
    under the ground
    unspoken wishes are left alone...
    beside the edge of the imagination...
    past the limits of sanity and insanity...
    I am the world
    I am the universe
    they aren't there anymore...
    they don't want no more of this shit...
    and the wishes are still unspoken.
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Still Here wrote:
    bump... (8-22-04...before "the crash")

    over the horizon
    under the ground
    unspoken wishes are left alone...
    beside the edge of the imagination...
    past the limits of sanity and insanity...
    I am the world
    I am the universe
    they aren't there anymore...
    they don't want no more of this shit...
    and the wishes are still unspoken.

    I'm hearing a slow four four tempo and a minor chord sequence. Something a bit like "Immortality". You should keep this one going. :cool:
  • Still Here wrote:
    bump... (8-22-04...before "the crash")

    over the horizon
    under the ground
    unspoken wishes are left alone...
    beside the edge of the imagination...
    past the limits of sanity and insanity...
    I am the world
    I am the universe
    they aren't there anymore...
    they don't want no more of this shit...
    and the wishes are still unspoken.
    I'm hearing a slow four four tempo and a minor chord sequence. Something a bit like "Immortality". You should keep this one going. :cool:

    above all others Finsbury, I hold your criticism dear...good or bad. cheers mate! Here's to you. Hope it works, I wrote that one 8 yrs. ago!

    PT. 2:

    painful as it seems
    untouched in dreams
    I walk amongst the fearless
    until they call me back together...
    while I'm apparently arranged...
    wonder aimlessly into the light...
    I am the hurt
    I feel your pain
    wash away with the tide...
    walk into the brighter day...
    and the wishes are still unspoken.

    CHEERS again FinsburyParkCarrots: one of my favorite poets.
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • Losing time into time
    Cannot shake these faulty scenes
    Take a pleasant picture
    It lasts ten times longer

    Taking life from life
    Feeling awash on the tide alone
    Free the son from the horizon
    Sent into a life of nothingness

    Walking until I'm legless
    Talking until I'm unheard
    These cocaine blues are killing me
    I fear these are my sudden final words
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,275
    Still Here wrote:
    This sick sad way of showing my sorrow
    won't do a damn good tomorrow
    I'll still be sick and sad
    I'll still be worried and mad
    caring or sharing
    no sense comparing
    myself to myself
    so if I reach for the stars
    and wish upon the brightest
    will I not be left reaching?
    the sun's heat
    reaches
    the ant, the concrete stairwell
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,275
    Still Here wrote:
    Losing time into time
    Cannot shake these faulty scenes
    Take a pleasant picture
    It lasts ten times longer

    Taking life from life
    Feeling awash on the tide alone
    Free the son from the horizon
    Sent into a life of nothingness

    Walking until I'm legless
    Talking until I'm unheard
    These cocaine blues are killing me
    I fear these are my sudden final words
    You may want to read Roddy Doyle's "Oh, Play That Thing." The main character comes to mind when I read this poem. Talk about not knowing if you live or die on a daily basis, and the main character has a leg issue at the end. It's funny, though. I don't remember cocaine involved.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • You may want to read Roddy Doyle's "Oh, Play That Thing." The main character comes to mind when I read this poem. Talk about not knowing if you live or die on a daily basis, and the main character has a leg issue at the end. It's funny, though. I don't remember cocaine involved.
    thanks, I'll look for it...sounds kinda interesting...even without the cocaine :D
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    painful as it seems
    untouched in dreams
    I walk amongst the fearless
    until they call me back together...
    while I'm apparently arranged...
    wonder aimlessly into the light...
    I am the hurt
    I feel your pain
    wash away with the tide...
    walk into the brighter day...
    and the wishes are still unspoken.


    the above makes me want to read the whole thread....but as I'm pressed for time.....I'll put that off for a while although I might read snippets....(snippets....hehehehehe)......I do like this one very much
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    painful as it seems
    untouched in dreams
    I walk amongst the fearless
    until they call me back together...
    while I'm apparently arranged...
    wonder aimlessly into the light...
    I am the hurt
    I feel your pain
    wash away with the tide...
    walk into the brighter day...
    and the wishes are still unspoken.


    the above makes me want to read the whole thread....but as I'm pressed for time.....I'll put that off for a while although I might read snippets....(snippets....hehehehehe)......I do like this one very much

    that's actually part 2 of another one on this thread...FinsburyParkCarrots 'requested' another verse, and I had to go from scratch...glad you liked it though, thanks!
    :)
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
  • You left me no choice.
    You wasted your time with me.
    You cannot see inside.
    You weren't my friend anymore.

    Talking in tongues
    Reaping the rewards
    Marking my territory
    Ending a beginning

    I'm not anywhere.
    I'm right here.
    I'm walking away now.
    I'm not anyone right now.

    Taking a Tuesday drive
    Waking a stranger
    Killing myself again
    Riding my wave
    PJ: Toledo-9/22/96. E. Lansing-8/18/98. Detroit-8/23/98. Detroit-10/7/00. Detroit-6/25 & 6/26/03. Toledo-10/2/04 [VFC]. Detroit-5/22/06. Chicago-8/5/07 [Lolla]. Cleveland-5/9/10. Baltimore-10/27/13.

    EV: Honolulu-4/21 & 4/22/07 [Kokua]. Detroit-6/26/11.
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