slightly

tenaciousAtenaciousA Posts: 604
edited February 2004 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
slightly off center
slightly not round
but soft
so soft
and skinned
slipping past oraclatious paths
catching in diastomacious spaces
catching in blood laden breath
so thick
and shivering
the points of my greater thans
pressing patterns in peach colored carbon
those rounds in my purple hands
like chains fired red hot
sizzled
and could not be held tightly enough
~all is full of love~
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  • keven 33keven 33 Posts: 259
    your light years smarter and more fluid than a lot of stuff here especially me awesome poem
    convicted
  • no... not boobs...


    thx k33 (:
    ~all is full of love~
  • soooo...


    anyone else wanna guess what this is about???



    (:

    Originally posted by NastAngels
    This about boobs right?
    ~all is full of love~
  • Originally posted by tenaciousA
    soooo...


    anyone else wanna guess what this is about???



    (:


    Ummmmmm, is it about ass then? :p

    Just kidding! Don't know what it's about but I do like it!

    Especially:

    "slipping past oraclatious paths
    catching in diastomacious spaces"


    I need your dictionary tA!! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    see topic, pm :)
    It's all yellow.


  • Originally posted by Being Enlightened
    I need your dictionary tA!! :D

    So do I! Those words ain't English! ;)
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  • Almost sounds like you're eating fruit...

    And you have gingivitis. :)

    Now yellow... why single me out?
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Peas. it's about peas, dammnaggit!

    :D
  • Now I'm thinking about being lost at sea. ;)

    Arrrr, matey! Thar he blows! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Originally posted by Yellow
    see topic, pm :)

    One for Yellow. ;)
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Originally posted by tenaciousA
    slightly off center
    slightly not round
    but soft
    so soft
    and skinned
    slipping past oraclatious paths
    catching in diastomacious spaces
    catching in blood laden breath
    so thick
    and shivering
    the points of my greater thans
    pressing patterns in peach colored carbon
    those rounds in my purple hands
    like chains fired red hot
    sizzled
    and could not be held tightly enough

    I know. It's your heart or heart pulse.

    :)
  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    Originally posted by Being Enlightened
    Now I'm thinking about being lost at sea. ;)

    Arrrr, matey! Thar he blows! :D


    the being is SO enlightened :):):)
    It's all yellow.


  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Hey yella....this Tenacious has given us a real puzzler.....

    Any suggestions?

    :D
  • Originally posted by FinsburyParkCarrots
    Hey yella....this Tenacious has given us a real puzzler.....

    Any suggestions?

    :D

    I'm sure she can come up with something... even if it is just a shot in the dark.
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  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    let's see...



    *I* think it's about getting a facial










    (:
    It's all yellow.


  • Originally posted by Yellow
    let's see...



    *I* think it's about getting a facial










    (:

    Just be sure not to get any in your eyes! It's stingy and makes them all red and icky, sticky!



























    Kinda like a shot in the dark! ;):D


    G'night folks! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Originally posted by Being Enlightened
    Just be sure not to get any in your eyes! It's stingy and makes them all red and icky, sticky!

    Kinda like a shot in the dark! ;):D


    G'night folks! :)

    Shot my g/f in the eye once. But I was down by her tummy.
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  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    good night, she who is enlightened...

    watch out for flying slugs in the dark...


    :D
    It's all yellow.


  • mulacmulac Posts: 97
    when i read it the first time i thought it was about fighting for a cause you don't believe in until you do


    but then again i'm full of shit and almost certain that that is not what it is about. that's what i got from it anyway



    good poem
    the passenger is life
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    I think this is about the human muscle known as the heart.

    just a guess.

    oh and I like it too.
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
  • My guess is the brain - final answer
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I was thinking of George Eliot's statement "There must be a systole and diastole in every enquiry", so I went to read up my old school biology notes on the heart, from years ago. Also, I have the complete OED (I mean the complete OED) in my library/study, and I went to check up the word tenacious used....
    there's no match in there...nothing really etymologically close...so I reckon tenacious is the next Finnegans Wake-era Joyce in creating a splendiferous neologism.
    As TS Eliot said, genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood, so tenacious can say we understood the implicature on a deep level even though we're still stumped about the basics......

    I think it's about the vicissitudes of lurve.
  • ha...

    oraclatious = teeth being the oral oracles, i.e. oraclatious path things must consecute to reach the inner mouth

    diastomacious - is a combination of two words

    diatomaceous = as in being filled with diatoms, or their skeletons

    (Diatoms = Any of various microscopic one-celled or colonial algae of the class Bacillariophyceae, having cell walls of silica consisting of two interlocking symmetrical valves.)


    diastema = a space, or gap between the teeth


    I was making things up, obviously, but they have roots, yes?


    This poem is about one special pleasure bestowed upon manhood.



    And so, yes, Finsbury, you would have found no such words in your OED. :) But thanks for trying. :)
    ~all is full of love~
  • Yellow is a lady genius.

    As is ten-A

    Praise be to the glorious venuses of the Hut!
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  • YellowYellow Posts: 699
    why thank you! :D
    It's all yellow.


  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    Originally posted by tenaciousA
    ha...

    oraclatious = teeth being the oral oracles, i.e. oraclatious path things must consecute to reach the inner mouth

    diastomacious - is a combination of two words

    diatomaceous = as in being filled with diatoms, or their skeletons

    (Diatoms = Any of various microscopic one-celled or colonial algae of the class Bacillariophyceae, having cell walls of silica consisting of two interlocking symmetrical valves.)


    diastema = a space, or gap between the teeth


    I was making things up, obviously, but they have roots, yes?


    This poem is about one special pleasure bestowed upon manhood.



    And so, yes, Finsbury, you would have found no such words in your OED. :) But thanks for trying. :)

    damn I feel silly now, I think in fact I asked miss ten a if this was about just what it was when she wrote it, and I forgot:o


    naughty young thing you are;)
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
  • at least i confused the population at large!






    naughty...


    hush!
    ~all is full of love~
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    Originally posted by tenaciousA
    at least i confused the population at large!







    naughty...


    hush!

    hush hush little ten a, don't say a word

    this forum going to treat you to a giant award;)




    naughty thing!
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
  • it already has







    (:
    ~all is full of love~
  • JDE-PJJDE-PJ Posts: 721
    Originally posted by tenaciousA
    it already has







    (:

    oh damn, I must have missed that:\

    how big was it, and where do you keep it now?

    on a shelf, on your tele, or somewhere else?


    congrats by the way;)
    I know someday you will have a beautiful Life


    Jason
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