The Young People With Their Instant Children

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
When I see the young people
With their instant children
So happy they nearly cease to exist,
I am compelled to throw fruit at them,
Or at least to trip them
As they pass.
It is not physical damage I wish them,
But rather,
Humiliation.
Or, more succinctly,
I wish to make concrete
The humiliation the rest of us feel
Watching their lardy sucklings
Trouncing through our world
Sans coordination or manners,
Summoning full-moon faces
At us from deep within
Comfy plush strollers
As if we were teats.
When I see the young people
With their edible infants
So content they almost entirely explode,
No heartfelt sentiment paints a smile upon me,
Nary one sincere hope for humanity in born
Within me.
Their helpless little creatures
Cling to them like needy snot
As they watch their carefree lives vanish,
Replaced by cacophonic mewling,
Senseless baby jabber,
And oatmeal-poop leaking onto sofas.
Even in restaurants sometimes
I spy these pubescant parents
Bending at the waist
To retrieve dropped food particles
Which had been cut into carefully tiny pieces,
Or stooping to search befuddled for keys
To go warm up the car,
Tucking just the right amount of blankies
And obscene stuffed wildlife
Into the car seat
So the clueless
Fully formed zygote won't take ill,
All in the name of pushing things forward,
Keeping their surname active in the world,
Inching the life cycle round it's loop,
Letting the planet twirl lazily
For another seventy years.
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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    Hello! when i think of young people with instant children i think of teenage mothers, but that doesn't seem to be your target, is it? when i think of teenage mothers i think of people who have an uphill battle socially, and it's possible they don't care, but the targets in your poem seem content. in fact, you use the word content. who are the young people with instant children?
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Why do these people with children make you so angry?
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  • This poem is not written from my point of view. I am not the narrator. Hope that helps.
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  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    groovematic this is very interesting.. i am going to read this many more times.. many of these observations are natural .. well written .. i'll post on this thread again. :)
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • Originally posted by Bibliobella
    Hello! when i think of young people with instant children i think of teenage mothers, but that doesn't seem to be your target, is it? when i think of teenage mothers i think of people who have an uphill battle socially, and it's possible they don't care, but the targets in your poem seem content. in fact, you use the word content. who are the young people with instant children?

    When I read it I took it from the perspective of an older person who has been trying for years to have a child, looking at young people...teenage or otherwise...who get pregnant so easily...and not caring or even thinking about the young people's possible uphill battle...to the narrator they *must* be content...but the narrator is clouded with his/her own frustration.

    Just another perspective.

    Probably wrong. ;)
  • When I read it I took it from the perspective of an older person who has been trying for years to have a child, looking at young people...teenage or otherwise...who get pregnant so easily...and not caring or even thinking about the young people's possible uphill battle...to the narrator they *must* be content...but the narrator is clouded with his/her own frustration.

    Just another perspective.

    Probably wrong. ;)

    Sounds like a pretty good interpretation to me. :)
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  • makes me think of abortion maybe
  • Divinely dressed,
    They get on at the third floor
    Wordlessly,
    Push their button.
    She clears her throat.
    The skin on her jaw is like vibrating mud.
    He glances at me.
    He has seen many just like me.
    He pities my youth,
    Remembers it as though it were a dream
    Thinly covered in pea soup.
    He is uninterested in the bravado
    I carry in the gesture of my shoulders,
    The immortality I feign with my knees,
    The smile in my eyes.
    He takes her hand gently.
    The doors slide closed with a hiss.
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  • He pities my youth,
    Remembers it as though it were a dream
    Thinly covered in pea soup.


    That's a poem in itself. Spot on writing. Thanks.
  • My life is laid around me on the floor--
    At least, that part of my life that has been spent
    Creating things--and it is a bit discouraging.
    Just words, mainly, on thin sheets of paper
    That, taken at face value, mean close to nothing.

    A stack of poems written when I was nineteen years old
    Is sitting three feet from a piano stool,
    A solid structure with use,
    Girth, weight.

    Mass.

    And next to that, my shoes.
    Oh, my shoes, comfortable, broken in,
    Reflecting my style of dress and economic strata.
    None of these poems are broken in.
    They are slick, controlled excercises in language,
    Far removed from daily life,
    The grind of bodies, commerce, motion.
    None of these poems fight back.
    I don't dream about them or their subjects.
    They are false, and their creator, a phoney.

    Another stack of poems--
    More recent ones, from only months ago--
    Is close to my roommates guitar,
    A heavy, shiny thing that changes the vibrations
    In the air around you,
    Makes people dance and move.

    These poems could change the vibrations in the air around me, too,
    If I whispered them at the walls,
    Or shouted them
    Out a window.
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  • jamitjamit Posts: 49
    I like how when I read your writings I can get a visual picture in my head of what is going on and actually see what I'm reading, if that makes sense.

    Thank you.
    YOU ARE..FAITHFULL, but no TREMOR CHRIST, and there's a DEAD MAN..GIVEN TO FLY

    "I feel the same way about disco as I do herpes" -Hunter S. Thompson
  • jamit wrote:
    I like how when I read your writings I can get a visual picture in my head of what is going on and actually see what I'm reading, if that makes sense.

    Thank you.

    Thank you very much...that is quite a compliment indeed! I shall endeavour to continue that...
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  • I like reading competent poets, your images mesh seemlessly into the narrative of your works, it's a very refreshing burst of talent...carry on.

    ETE
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    I went to the poetry Olympics last year
    it was very hush hush
    there were poets of all sorts
    and some others too
    we all eye-balled each other
    and held tight our work
    (as though they were worth stealing)
    last year I went to the poetry Olympics
    ah, life, what's its value
    I went to the poetry Olympics
    and finally I realised
    we're all poets
    ah, life, what's its value?
    we're all the same
    too bad
    too good
    smirk/wink/nudge
    we like eating ice-cream and fudge
    oh, I went to the poetry Olympics
    I had such a blast
    (even though I came last)
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    I went to the poetry Olympics last year
    it was very hush hush
    there were poets of all sorts
    and some others too
    we all eye-balled each other
    and held tight our work
    (as though they were worth stealing)
    last year I went to the poetry Olympics
    ah, life, what's its value
    I went to the poetry Olympics
    and finally I realised
    we're all poets
    ah, life, what's its value?
    we're all the same
    too bad
    too good
    smirk/wink/nudge
    we like eating ice-cream and fudge
    oh, I went to the poetry Olympics
    I had such a blast
    (even though I came last)


    wow....makes me smile. Makes me wanna write more poetry. Makes me wanna hug you. Thanks.
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  • I read about us
    In magazines
    Or journals
    All the time.
    It seems
    There are too many of us
    And we depress those chosen few
    Who have--
    On occasion--
    Recieved money
    To do
    What I do
    In order to breathe;
    These professionals
    Horde more money yet
    By churning out
    Insightful how-to
    Articles and
    Detailed diagrams on
    How To Break Into The Biz.
    Meanwhile, the rest of us
    Keep grinding it out,
    Pushing life through
    A hole in a tomato.

    Somewhere there is a
    Probably small patch of
    Imagined land,
    Where
    The poet who is paid in money
    And the poet who is paid in toil
    Can meet, if only
    In ideals and dark dreams.
    If all us classes of poets
    Were to someday have a meeting there,
    I think I'd raise my hand
    To point out
    The only professional poet
    I've ever met
    Is the tree which stands in my backyard,
    And it hasn't written anything new
    In ages.
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  • The large oil tanks
    By the side of the road
    Mean that we
    Are close
    To grandmaw's house.
    Once we leave
    Grandmaw's house
    The large oil tanks
    By the other side
    Of the road
    Mean that we
    Are close
    To home.
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  • All this darkness, I said to her,
    What are we to do
    With all the darkness?

    She assured me
    Crossly
    Light was seeping
    Through like holes
    In a tapestry;
    The summer evening sky.

    Her furrowed brow
    Lit a cigarette,
    Released breath.

    All this darkness--
    I pounded my point home--
    Slips over department stores
    Like a coffin-lid,
    Draws horses
    To empty troughs,
    Wayward feet toward
    Soaked taverns.


    She exhaled smoke-breath
    And expletives,
    Another hole
    Punched in the birthing sky.
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  • Scores of us populate the world;
    So many of us, in fact,
    There are houses and magazines
    Set aside for us,
    Whole towns of us.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot swallow one caplet
    Of Tylenol with Codeine
    Without being lost to the world
    For months;
    A domino effect of staggering size
    Being tipped and running it's course
    Through woozy alleyways,
    Poorly-lit basements,
    The naked paying arms of strangers,
    Ending at last
    In any number of sanctioned
    Sanitary humorless barricades,
    To be taught how to not start it
    All over again
    When left alone.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot be trusted to eat a steak:
    The glinty cerration of the inevitable
    Knife to them a siren's call,
    Promising moments of actual emotion,
    Something truly felt.
    And when all the dinner guests
    Have left, to the hall closet
    They'll retire,
    Blade and bandages at the ready
    To pierce and puncture in a wholly
    Sloppy yet methodical manner,
    Taking pause to ensure
    It is nothing a long-sleeved shirt won't hide;
    And again and again over years,
    Drawing maps of mended sensation.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot rent certain kinds of films;
    Movies in which folks disrobe and exchange
    Closely personal things, heaving
    And gasping as though in shock.
    Upon viewing these images
    The defective person would be set upon
    By a precise personal demon
    Which will force them to force themselves
    Upon any number of strangers
    In a rippling series of carnal escapades,
    Finding closure perhaps
    Within a cold set of handcuffs
    Or the sights of a perturbed father's shotgun,
    Never quite reaching that hightened plateau
    That the films so clearly showed as possible.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot imbibe a drop of the wrong
    Cough-syrup lest they be thrown
    Into the oubliette of self-pity and rage,
    Seeking out and certainly finding
    Syrups suited to illness beyond coughing,
    This journey taking them through the simplest
    Daytime restuarant to the scourges of the night,
    Anything with running liquid,
    Money fleeing pockets faster than they can swallow.
    They'll dream about it,
    About running from it and into it,
    Until substantial reality fades to be replaced
    By a hyper-subreality of smoke-filled places,
    Sweat issuing the odors of brand-names,
    Their insides churning the pain of death.

    Scores of us populate the world;
    So many of us, in fact,
    That we are quite everywhere.
    We are not to be pitied or feared,
    Merely expected.
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  • These reporters keep asking me,
    "Where do you get the ideas for your poems?"
    Usually I tell them, after clearing my throat,
    That I do a little dance in my bathroom,
    One part Waltz,
    One part Tango,
    One part Mashed Potato,
    Followed by a complicated hair ritual
    During which I part my hair three ways
    And then reverse it.
    After that I scrawl complex verbage in the steam
    On my mirror,
    Which is always golden anthologizable verse.
    That is what I tell them when they ask.

    But it's a lie.
    I have no idea how to Tango.
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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    groovematic....I commend you on your fictionalized version of otherness.....but I can tell you madness is a lot worse than this.....
    Scores of us populate the world;
    So many of us, in fact,
    There are houses and magazines
    Set aside for us,
    Whole towns of us.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot swallow one caplet
    Of Tylenol with Codeine
    Without being lost to the world
    For months;
    A domino effect of staggering size
    Being tipped and running it's course
    Through woozy alleyways,
    Poorly-lit basements,
    The naked paying arms of strangers,
    Ending at last
    In any number of sanctioned
    Sanitary humorless barricades,
    To be taught how to not start it
    All over again
    When left alone.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot be trusted to eat a steak:
    The glinty cerration of the inevitable
    Knife to them a siren's call,
    Promising moments of actual emotion,
    Something truly felt.
    And when all the dinner guests
    Have left, to the hall closet
    They'll retire,
    Blade and bandages at the ready
    To pierce and puncture in a wholly
    Sloppy yet methodical manner,
    Taking pause to ensure
    It is nothing a long-sleeved shirt won't hide;
    And again and again over years,
    Drawing maps of mended sensation.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot rent certain kinds of films;
    Movies in which folks disrobe and exchange
    Closely personal things, heaving
    And gasping as though in shock.
    Upon viewing these images
    The defective person would be set upon
    By a precise personal demon
    Which will force them to force themselves
    Upon any number of strangers
    In a rippling series of carnal escapades,
    Finding closure perhaps
    Within a cold set of handcuffs
    Or the sights of a perturbed father's shotgun,
    Never quite reaching that hightened plateau
    That the films so clearly showed as possible.

    There is the defective
    Who cannot imbibe a drop of the wrong
    Cough-syrup lest they be thrown
    Into the oubliette of self-pity and rage,
    Seeking out and certainly finding
    Syrups suited to illness beyond coughing,
    This journey taking them through the simplest
    Daytime restuarant to the scourges of the night,
    Anything with running liquid,
    Money fleeing pockets faster than they can swallow.
    They'll dream about it,
    About running from it and into it,
    Until substantial reality fades to be replaced
    By a hyper-subreality of smoke-filled places,
    Sweat issuing the odors of brand-names,
    Their insides churning the pain of death.

    Scores of us populate the world;
    So many of us, in fact,
    That we are quite everywhere.
    We are not to be pitied or feared,
    Merely expected.

    I hope you never experience what it is like to be 'different'.....but until you do....I like your peom.....
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISN wrote:
    groovematic....I commend you on your fictionalized version of otherness.....but I can tell you madness is a lot worse than this.....



    I hope you never experience what it is like to be 'different'.....but until you do....I like your peom.....


    perhaps your madness is unlike the one portrayed here, ISN, but I can assure you many do experience madness quite like it. I know I have. The fourth big stanza--the stanza of the alcoholic--is of my experience. The others have been experienced by many close to me. Read my "The Merits of Life" for a bigger picture. Thanks for the kind words also!
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  • When I see the young people
    With their instant children
    So happy they nearly cease to exist,

    brilliant poem what beautiful imagery

    i wondered if it might also be a reference to how comfortable life has become for so many of us in western society. so much so that many people go without experiencing real life, but on the same thread believe that they are. there is so much going on in the world, a lot of it bad, but this whole idea about protecting ourselves and others around us is preventing us from having real experiences.

    just a thought, but one that is quite prominant in my mind at the moment as i too am living this comfportable life and womndering what is outside this western middleclass planet.

    love sam
    'Be nice to one another'
    'everyones new years resolution should be to comment positively on things that they see as worthy of comment. practice now and by new year we will be great at it!'
  • (o:sam:o) wrote:
    brilliant poem what beautiful imagery

    i wondered if it might also be a reference to how comfortable life has become for so many of us in western society. so much so that many people go without experiencing real life, but on the same thread believe that they are. there is so much going on in the world, a lot of it bad, but this whole idea about protecting ourselves and others around us is preventing us from having real experiences.

    just a thought, but one that is quite prominant in my mind at the moment as i too am living this comfportable life and womndering what is outside this western middleclass planet.

    love sam

    some really interesting thoughts, Sam. Truthfully, I had never thought of the poem in those terms before; now that you've brought it up, I don't see any way around it. That most certainly is an element of the poem, even if it wasn't in my mind when writing it. Thank you.
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  • 5 molars, 2 incisors, 1 canine

    scattered seemingly random
    through the rain glazed gutter


    blood, liberally Rorschacked


    screaming

    sometimes, when you glide
    thru life,
    the fat hand of Chance

    reaches down

    to knock the shit out of you.
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    The dog runs away when I come near,
    Like it always has.
    Off to the garage somewhere,
    Or to nose around in the garden,
    Maybe.
    The skinny gray cat, however,
    Allows me to stroke him.
    I like the cat, with his rough,
    Sandpaper coat and vibrating
    Contentment.
    The cat meets my gaze with honesty,
    Commiserating over the heat,
    The long days
    And the loud cars
    Which are ceaseless.

    The house towers above us,
    Is taller than even our cars.
    It is lit up like a ballroom,
    And tonight it promises
    To keep all wild things out,
    Like it always has.
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  • The large oil tanks
    By the side of the road
    Mean that we
    Are close
    To grandmaw's house.
    Once we leave
    Grandmaw's house
    The large oil tanks
    By the other side
    Of the road
    Mean that we
    Are close
    To home.

    THe simplicity of this one blows me away every time I read it, groovy.
  • 5 molars, 2 incisors, 1 canine

    scattered seemingly random
    through the rain glazed gutter


    blood, liberally Rorschacked


    screaming

    sometimes, when you glide
    thru life,
    the fat hand of Chance

    reaches down

    to knock the shit out of you.

    wow...this is unlike anything I've ever read.
    i can still bite my toenails.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    THe simplicity of this one blows me away every time I read it, groovy.

    thanks so much, shiftless. i was going for a simplicity that became more complicated after you read it--i hope that's what hapened.
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Richard Simmons is a terrible man.
    He seems to be more happy than
    A sleeping, lazy, noiseless cat
    Which doesn't mind being fat.
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