I hate to do this, but could you guys help me title this?

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
A title just completely eludes me. I thought you guys might be able to help.

Just one restriction: I don't want the words "ivory throat" in the title.

Any help will be appreciated!





I know of another woman
With an ivory throat
Who washes clothes by hand
With Lava soap
And wakes each day
With flowers in her hair;
She doesn't like bees
(although she's never been stung)
This woman with the ivory throat.

When she plants a garden
(which she does, she does)
Her plants grow plump
And juicy inside
And you can hear them sigh
As she walks by,
Her gardening-skirt
Rippling with her thighs.
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  • NastNast Posts: 127
    My Fair Lady
    The king of run on sentences...
  • NastNast Posts: 127
    Nevermind that one is already taken... lol =P

    Strawberry Tea
    The king of run on sentences...
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Nast wrote:
    Nevermind that one is already taken... lol =P

    Strawberry Tea

    i like the sound of it....is it from something?
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  • NastNast Posts: 127
    Just the lady you described, to me it sounded as though something she would drink.
    The king of run on sentences...
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Nast wrote:
    Just the lady you described, to me it sounded as though something she would drink.

    I think you are right. She would drink that. It is certainly a usable title.
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Dude, if it is personal to you and has hidden menaing only you can describe then you title it. It won't work from us.

    But it's not personal at all. The woman in this poem is entirely fictional.
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  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    Primary Colours
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    edit....the reason I said 'primary colours' for a title is because of the artist, Gaugin.....the peom reminds me of a Gaugin painting......
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • steppenwolfsteppenwolf Posts: 164
    String Beans and Fat Ankles
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    ISN wrote:
    edit....the reason I said 'primary colours' for a title is because of the artist, Gaugin.....the peom reminds me of a Gaugin painting......

    ahhh...makes much more sense now...thanks for the suggestion!
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    String Beans and Fat Ankles

    I actually kinda like this one....it's bizarre but serious....
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  • This may be a bit off the wall, but how about "The Barren"?
    If going right is wrong, I don't wanna go right!
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    This may be a bit off the wall, but how about "The Barren"?

    It's an interesting idea...maybe sounds a bit too negative, though? I'm not sure...interesting....
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  • It's an interesting idea...maybe sounds a bit too negative, though? I'm not sure...interesting....

    I suppose it is somewhat negative....I thought I detected an undercurrent of negativity beneath the seemingly positive poem...?
    If going right is wrong, I don't wanna go right!
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I suppose it is somewhat negative....I thought I detected an undercurrent of negativity beneath the seemingly positive poem...?

    I would say that you're right about that, but I wouldn't want to give too much away with the title, eh? :)
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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    A title just completely eludes me. I thought you guys might be able to help.

    Just one restriction: I don't want the words "ivory throat" on the title.

    Any help will be appreciated!





    I know of another woman
    With an ivory throat
    Who washes clothes by hand
    With Lava soap
    And wakes each day
    With flowers in her hair;
    She doesn't like bees
    (although she's never been stung)
    This woman with the ivory throat.

    When she plants a garden
    (which she does, she does)
    Her plants grow plump
    And juicy inside
    And you can hear them sigh
    As she walks by,
    Her gardening-skirt
    Rippling with her thighs.

    Fold or Folds (now I need to fill up space for 50 characters.)
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Fold or Folds (now I need to fill up space for 50 characters.)

    Are you suggesting the title of "Fold or Folds" or "Fold" or "Folds"?
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  • Ms. HaikuMs. Haiku Posts: 7,265
    Are you suggesting the title of "Fold or Folds" or "Fold" or "Folds"?
    Oops, sorry, Mr. Groove. I meant either "Fold" or "Folds."
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Flower Lady
    White
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Bella and Ali....you both have AWESOME suggestions....there are so many great suggestions in this thread that I now have an almost bigger problem than I did before....nonetheless...keep 'em coming!!!
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Why thank you groove...good to see you enjoying yourself today:)Rage on!
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    Why thank you groove...good to see you enjoying yourself today:)Rage on!

    Having the time of my life, A!
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    I knew you were.I can just picture you with the Dr. Pepper in hand....
    a hotdog or two...and a beach chair.;)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    I knew you were.I can just picture you with the Dr. Pepper in hand....
    a hotdog or two...and a beach chair.;)

    You know me so well! I actually AM drinking Dr. Pepper...and when I go out to smoke I sit in a beach chair.

    And man do I ever love hot dogs!
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    When I smoke...I'm on either of the two porches or in the dungeon.OOps...I mean...basement.
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    When I smoke...I'm on either of the two porches or in the dungeon.OOps...I mean...basement.

    I've always loved being in basements, for whatever reason...there is something distinctly unusual about being underground....plus, I've always loved the smell, since I was a kid....that musty smell...if they could make that in a cologne I'd wear it....
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Hey!how Did You Italicize Unusual?
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    Hey!how Did You Italicize Unusual?

    you do italics like this, except without the spaces:


    [ i ] unusual [/i]

    same with bold:

    [ b ] bold [ /b ]

    just no spaces
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    qUIT QUO PRO dOCTOR.tOO MUCH BRAIN WORK FOR ME!
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Ali wrote:
    qUIT QUO PRO dOCTOR.tOO MUCH BRAIN WORK FOR ME!

    its actually rather easy...comes in handy for me as i like to use italics in my poetry....
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