Write the next line in this poem!

grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
edited June 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I'm going to write the first line of a poem. Feel free to contribute the next one (and then someone else write the 3rd line and so forth...) Let's end it at ten lines and see what we've got!

The first line is the next post.
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I don't like big open spaces
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  • I don't like big open spaces

    I like my green eggs and ham in small places
    This is the best I could come up with.
  • Anna_falkAnna_falk Posts: 114
    I like my green eggs and ham in small places
    And the sudden feeling of freedom in a big hollow atmosphere it scares me
    To worry about tomorrow doesn't make it easier,
    it only makes today worse.
  • sicnevolsicnevol Posts: 180
    Never liked the ones I never knew, let 'em walk all over me and flirt with you..
    I shall sit here in my little square and watch.
    That's two things we've got, Tape and Time.
  • nailz100nailz100 Posts: 1,176
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies
    Only with our eyes closed can we truly see
  • nailz100 wrote:
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies

    but to your soul, i see right through your eyes
    "Provided there are no pre-conditions"

    Originally posted by MrBrian -

    "one day a country may just liberate america, what will you say then?"
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    3 more lines and the poem shall be complete!!!
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Here is the poem so far:
    (I've done my interpretation of the punctuation and line spacing...feel free to yell at me for it...)


    I don't like big open spaces.
    I like my green eggs and ham in small places.
    And the sudden feeling of freedom in a big hollow atmosphere it scares me.

    Never liked the ones I never knew, let 'em walk all over me and flirt with you...
    I shall sit here in my little square and watch
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies.
    But to your soul, I see right through your eyes.
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  • pearlmuttpearlmutt Posts: 392
    Which patch of fabric are you, which swatch?
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I don't like big open spaces.
    I like my green eggs and ham in small places.
    And the sudden feeling of freedom in a big hollow atmosphere it scares me.

    Never liked the ones I never knew, let 'em walk all over me and flirt with you...
    I shall sit here in my little square and watch
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies.
    But to your soul, I see right through your eyes.

    Which patch of fabric are you, which swatch?
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  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    I don't like big open spaces.
    I like my green eggs and ham in small places.
    And the sudden feeling of freedom in a big hollow atmosphere it scares me.

    Never liked the ones I never knew, let 'em walk all over me and flirt with you...
    I shall sit here in my little square and watch
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies.
    But to your soul, I see right through your eyes.

    Which patch of fabric are you, which swatch?

    In the ether of your denim, rests your thoughts
  • bossman3188bossman3188 Posts: 263
    In the ether of your denim, rests your thoughts


    and rest your thoughts so you can dream again.
    there'll be time for laughin'
    there's no time to cry
    soon i will be leavin'
    look me in the eye
    no matter what's in front of me
    it's your face that i'll see
  • sicnevolsicnevol Posts: 180
    so that maybe II can seem lovely again.
    That's two things we've got, Tape and Time.
  • Hic Haec Hoc.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I don't like big open spaces.
    I like my green eggs and ham in small places.
    And the sudden feeling of freedom in a big hollow atmosphere it scares me.

    Never liked the ones I never knew, let 'em walk all over me and flirt with you...
    I shall sit here in my little square and watch
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies.
    But to your soul, I see right through your eyes.

    Which patch of fabric are you, which swatch?
    I am the ether of your denim, rest your thoughts;
    And rest your thoughts so you can dream again
    So that maybe I can seem lovely again.
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    so, is everyone who submitted a line OK with how I punctuated/spaced the final poem? if not feel free to respond.

    anyone have any idea for the title?
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Hic Haec Hoc.

    sorry fins. i don't know what this is. :)
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  • Anna_falkAnna_falk Posts: 114
    Yeah, I liked it, very funny to see how it developed : )
    To worry about tomorrow doesn't make it easier,
    it only makes today worse.
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    I don't like big open spaces.
    I like my green eggs and ham in small places.
    And the sudden feeling of freedom
    in a big hollow atmosphere it scares me.

    Never liked the ones I never knew,
    let 'em walk all over me and flirt with you...
    I shall sit here in my little square and watch
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies.
    But to your soul, I see right through your eyes.

    Which patch of fabric are you, which swatch?
    In the ether of your denim, rest your thoughts;
    And rest your thoughts so you can dream again
    So that maybe I can seem lovely
  • sorry fins. i don't know what this is. :)

    http://www.tonyhancock.org.uk/ham6scripts4.html

    Nominative hic haec hoc
    Genitive huius huius huius
    Dative huic huic huic
    Accusative hunc hanc hoc
    Ablative hoc hac hoc
    Nominative hi hae haec
    Genitive horum harum horum
    Dative his his his
    Accusative hos has haec
    Ablative his his his

    :):):)
  • EvilToasterElfEvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    http://www.tonyhancock.org.uk/ham6scripts4.html

    Nominative hic haec hoc
    Genitive huius huius huius
    Dative huic huic huic
    Accusative hunc hanc hoc
    Ablative hoc hac hoc
    Nominative hi hae haec
    Genitive horum harum horum
    Dative his his his
    Accusative hos has haec
    Ablative his his his

    :):):)

    Bloody brilliant, makes me wish for good radio shows to come back
  • Bloody brilliant, makes me wish for good radio shows to come back

    Galton and Simpson were in my opinion Britain's finest comedy scriptwriters and Hancock our finest comedian.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    I don't like big open spaces.
    I like my green eggs and ham in small places.
    And the sudden feeling of freedom
    in a big hollow atmosphere it scares me.

    Never liked the ones I never knew,
    let 'em walk all over me and flirt with you...
    I shall sit here in my little square and watch
    All the drowning fools, choking on their little lies.
    But to your soul, I see right through your eyes.

    Which patch of fabric are you, which swatch?
    In the ether of your denim, rest your thoughts;
    And rest your thoughts so you can dream again
    So that maybe I can seem lovely

    I do like yours better...except I love the repetition of 'again' in the last two lines.
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  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    Does anybody want to start a new one? Give us a first line, how many lines we're doing and let's go again!
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  • Bloodblack bog pools, throating mountain rain
  • dunkmandunkman Posts: 19,646
    Bloodblack bog pools, throating mountain rain

    A quick relief, sodden grief, this elixir for pain
    oh scary... 40000 morbidly obese christians wearing fanny packs invading europe is probably the least scariest thing since I watched an edited version of The Care Bears movie in an extremely brightly lit cinema.
  • grooveamaticgrooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    A quick relief, sodden grief, this elixir for pain

    Astride a hill, my boots agree sitting is enough
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  • overstandoverstand Posts: 54
    surrender to me your insides
  • overstand wrote:
    surrender to me your insides

    O quartzblue rising crags, inner mystery vista'd
  • My baggage heavy, but I see the light
    Smokey Robinson constantly looks like he's trying to act natural after being accused of farting.
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