To make a terrible thief

tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
edited October 2010 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I'd be a rubbish burglar
I would just break in, sit down
And help myself to the food -
A gannet stuck to the table.
I rob myself every day
Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
Send my credentials to the house of detention

lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
Post edited by Unknown User on
«1

Comments

  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    love this...

    i've no idea what it means, and perhaps that's why :)


    encore
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited July 2010
    the spectrum of emotional memory
    diverse & distinct
    as colour, sound & smell
    this is not animal impulse
    it is sentient flavour
    triggering qualities past
    i have no name to describe it
    this is part of me only
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    lovely lovely...

    thank you :)
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    any time! there's plenty more where they come from. Thanks for the encouragement :)
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    He

    At the heart
    of my maelstrom of terror
    I once stepped out
    Into a white room
    Calm as a lake

    Four men (or five?)
    sat whispering gently

    They knew each other
    They knew me.

    The shy black man
    at the centre
    was leader; yet removed,
    Who the others consulted, deferred, protected

    He looked straight into me

    Said without words
    "We know you.
    We love you.
    We protect you.
    Here'

    and then they whispered
    amongst themselves again
    Gentle, quietly, with no animosity.

    With the gravity of
    the meeting
    Yet the quiet grace,
    joy
    of knowing
    They truly were good
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    The most beautiful thing I ever saw
    I've ever seen
    Was the rose
    The ulraviolet rose
    That blossomed out of red brickwork
    Before my eyes
    Confronting me at midnight

    That night.

    At the heart of my terror, pursuit, chase
    Dead-end
    Was the flower

    Blossoming so beautiful
    It made me stop, dead
    Gasp
    Catch breath
    Amidst the horrors

    Beauty sprouting from
    the dirty alleyways of madness
    No symbollic vision this
    Literal
    Vibrant
    Skeletal
    Blooming
    Shadowy insinuation
    of imperceptible fragile backdrop
    of gods building blocks
    spilling out and breaching
    the shattered dusky primary world
    of my meaningless and hopeless
    Despair
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Raising, being a boy

    I just passed a boy
    Smiling, open, happy
    Holding his mother's hand

    Who'd want to bring a boy into this world?
    To watch him start wide-eyed
    and awestruck with wonder

    To see it ruthlessly &
    Systematically
    Beaten out of him
    Through comprehensive
    Derision
    Sneering, derisory (ritual)
    Bullying, numbing; desensitizing

    'Toughening him up'

    Until finally he is ready
    To emerge unashamed - into the tribe
    With that single mature bird-call

    "Yeah, and fuck you too pal"
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • eyedclaareyedclaar Posts: 6,980
    These are awesome. The whole confronted by the flower at midnight image... fucking fantastaorgasmathon.
    Idaho's Premier Outdoor Writer

    Please Support My Writing Habit By Purchasing A Book:

    https://www.createspace.com/3437020

    http://www.facebook.com/profile.php?id=100000663025696

    http://earthtremors.blogspot.com/
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    eyedclaar wrote:
    These are awesome. The whole confronted by the flower at midnight image... fucking fantastaorgasmathon.

    Thanks (lots) for the appreciation. I have quite a few journals of stuff collected from the last 8 years or so. And the scariest thing about them is they are all true!

    Will try and pace it according to timings and fragility..... :? :):D;)
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Depths

    There is no depth
    No pit
    No door
    No lock
    from which you cannot escape
    No rock
    from which you cannot
    build


    12266683035bfyVEV.jpg
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Going Home (1996)

    When my Dad finally
    came to collect me
    From that place
    And take me home,
    All I could think of
    Was the mass of newspapers
    And mess left under my bed.
    What would become of them?

    A nurse gripped my arm
    'Don't worry,
    Get out of here -
    I don't ever
    Want to see you here again.'
    Dispatched
    To the Outside World
    With abrupt steely kindness.

    Still, I scurried back to try
    and tidy up the detritus.

    What chaos to leave
    For the next resident.
    What if they became haunted
    By my horror?
    As if every image
    Hallucination, vision, terror
    and dissolute idea
    Still lay there trapped under glass
    Between the dull and faded sheets
    of last year's magazines
    secreted under my bed
    And might haunt them too.

    My life: the regimen of dormitory rituals;
    Of locked and unlocked drawers
    Possessions, trinkets, cryptic codes
    Cheap amulets and talismen
    Which only I knew how to decipher
    Had already been meticulously dismantled
    Dissolved, dismembered by
    The Staff
    And now seemed inconclusive
    Impotent, insubstantial....

    Nevertheless I shuffled
    my legs towards the shuffling the magazines

    'Leave them, Go!'

    Next thing I knew
    I was outside,
    And as I shut the solid heavy door
    Of my father's off-white car
    Clunk
    I knew it was over
    It was finished

    The viscous & solid green-blue world
    Rose up to surround me
    In my Dad's firm embrace.
    He looking more troubled
    Than me.

    I was calm,
    Just bewildered
    Stunned, staggering
    Stumbling blinking
    Into daylight
    Reeling, drunk, yet still on my feet.
    (You would not believe the nightmares I've just seen)

    I shook myself alert, awake
    Looked squarely into my father's unblinking eyes,
    and said
    "Can we just go home now please Dad?"
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • chadwickchadwick Posts: 21,157
    very well done
    all of them
    who are you?
    you are good, that's who.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    chadwick wrote:
    very well done
    all of them
    who are you?
    you are good, that's who.

    Thankyou kindly
    True, I'm me
    Or was it you you left behiiiiind?
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited July 2010
    The Cedar Room

    'You're organised girl'
    'You've got to be the most charming organised nigga
    If you ever want to walk out of here boy'


    377434_1_f.jpeg
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited July 2010
    She Once Soared

    When she was younger
    she would fly on thermal tides
    over vacant fields
    and be swooping from a secret,
    that noone but her knew

    And now that she’s a woman
    maybe she forgets
    that wonder of looking down
    from way on high
    onto unknown,
    unknowing farmsteads,
    and of diving next to swallows
    into glister-glistening lights

    And perhaps she has forgotten
    the nights
    being lonely, sad and free;
    but I have not forgotten
    what she told me she had seen
    and the sights and views she fell from
    with barely a single scream

    swallow%20eyel1.JPG
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    The Outsiders Walk Straight Past Us
    (in progress)

    The outsiders walk straight past us,
    Burst through the one-way door
    Rush so far and forward
    We ‘re not really there at all

    Desperately searching for a loved one
    The familiar corridor face
    Last trace, last bone, last remnant
    Of a child’s remaining trait
    The one you used to love,
    The ones in the right place

    Us lucky ones found early
    With passports back to health
    But if you find it darling
    Won’t you Keep it to yourself?
    Please; it’s no good to look around you
    These are strangers on the shelf
    Those are not your sons and daughters;
    They’re simply waifs and strays
    So keep your eyes fixed straight ahead love
    Don’t peer into the corners
    That you can't afford to reach.
    We’re simply shadows in the mist here
    Don't touch us, please don't kiss

    So don’t file for an adoption
    Whilst you're stuck here in the midst
    Go round & round the houses
    Stick or call, don’t raise and twist
    Recognise your relation?
    Pick them up and turn around
    bags packed already waiting
    ‘neath that only exit sign

    Pray deliver us from this evil,
    Walk out and don’t look round
    I’m pleading with you darling
    Step away, don’t run-aground

    Better to stay blinkered
    Than collapse under this weight
    Of other mother’s children
    Who know their only fate
    Deserted now (eternal)
    & merging with the dust
    Of single heartfelt traces,
    Of poppy-leaves and rust

    Don’t connect with anyone else Mum
    You haven’t got the strength,
    So look neither left or right dear
    to see some other offspring
    & condemn them to their fate,
    It will only break your heart ma'am -
    And none of us want to see that

    So keep believing I'm not one of them
    And take that to your grave
    We may still yet get out ma
    There’s something left to save
    But linger here a second longer,
    & Inertia starts to creep
    That particular way
    It gets under your skin
    Like some ancient itching wound

    Overstay your welcome
    and tarry just too long -
    You’ll catch a rich contagion
    Of horror & of tears;
    They saturate these walls
    (nigh-on eight hundred years)

    This man is your son girl
    Don’t you see him sitting there?
    Don’t argue with us now dear
    Whilst the wounds are being bared
    We’re so close to the end now
    Just forget about the rest
    You’ll only spoil it for the others
    Who are yet to fail the test

    You may not recognise your boy yet,
    but we’ll work it out somehow
    Take him now and go ma’am,
    Leave those spirits well alone
    Come back another day and
    Find them wandering here tomorrow
    In forever’s day before
    In The ‘lost and found’ department
    (We’re sticking to the floor)

    We eternally look for something –
    That we’ve only just put down
    Had it just a second before you
    Even came in through the door
    But now you’re here
    The headless searching
    Is calling us some more

    We’ve gone & truly lost it
    And we’re not about to stop
    So please don’t reach towards us
    With our smarting and our pain
    It could really bowl you over
    And you wouldn’t want to stay

    Just pick up the child beside you
    And be safely on your way
    You’re amongst the lucky ones
    Two of the contingent
    That will fight another day

    But Ma your very name is on the tips of all our tongues
    Each parched in its own desert
    But looking for the door,
    praying for deliverance
    From the drought of many suns
    running out of water
    With nowhere left to run
    Yes, see these souls as human
    And your heart will surely break

    So stick with me alone dear,
    I'm as much as you can take
    Tick the box next to my name
    And free me from this hell
    These are not your sons and daughters
    Don’t ever let them in;
    The sky is falling down now
    And the walls are wearing thin.

    4104007281_e072659f54.jpg?w=200&h=100
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Img60F700A0-1.jpg
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • mysticweedmysticweed Posts: 3,710
    These are really good. So much to take in, so many visuals, so many parts with which I can identify.
    yes, these are good, keep 'em coming!
    fuck 'em if they can't take a joke

    "what a long, strange trip it's been"
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    lettinggo wrote:
    These are really good. So much to take in, so many visuals, so many parts with which I can identify.
    yes, these are good, keep 'em coming!


    merci beaucoup!

    Yes is hard not to just 'splurge' everything into a painful bloody mess. Seem to have lost one major journal of decent stuff which I saw a few weeks ago, so instead have been dredging up some skeletal remains which have been collecting at the bottom of my cellar over the past 15 years, and fleshing them out a bit (or a lot!). Can get quite demanding, so I'm hoping the journal will turn up again cos those are more fully formed.

    Images are cool, tho what seem great one day can become 'naff' two days later, whereas words seem to stick around a bit better (tho can also quicly become naff).

    Anyway, will see what the coming fortnight summons forth!!

    thx
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    the difference

    The difference between
    Them and me
    You and me
    Is one tenth
    Of a degree

    My friend who speaks at night
    On his own in the yard
    In the garden, to himself
    Made perfect sense
    When I only stopped to listen

    Saw him today outside a bar
    He said that place
    Was 'boring'

    We are two encounters away
    From being flushed down the pan
    The difference
    Between the man with the beard & bottle
    And the man with the jawbone & the throttle
    It's £1000 pounds
    To fall on -
    An audience, a destination, a mission
    A packet of tobacco, a set of house keys
    A believer
    One believer - that's the cost of Sanity

    My friend had 165 objects in his pocket
    He proved it to me, counted them out
    Then we solved an equation and
    An irresolvable game of chess
    And returned to swearing at the nurses.
    40 years old and half his life
    Running, swearing, justifying
    He was the only decent conversation in that place

    A place to leave your wallet
    Where it won't get nicked
    A place to walk out to
    When you are forced by the throat
    To the wall
    That's a home

    The floor
    So unforgiving
    Is where they trap you
    Five men, scratching clawing sweating brutes
    Violating my being
    Pinning me down with a knee in the back
    So hard it makes you squeal
    Makes you kneel
    Makes you piss
    Makes you weep
    Makes you find no man
    Is tougher than the floor
    Always the floor
    So unforgiving
    So bleeding
    So breathless
    So unkind

    So i get up and swear back for 3 months
    And then I'm better

    The difference
    Between you and me
    You and them
    Is one of degree

    A phonecall with nobody on the end
    A conversation with a half-day delay
    A game of tennis with no ball
    A raincoat on a sunny day
    For us
    That's enough now
    To be locked away.

    But I'd rather stay with my friend
    With the bottle and the chess board
    and the giggle
    The one who knows who he is
    Knows he is misjudged mistreated
    And is so much more forgiving
    Than your floor
    Always the floor
    Dented like plasticine
    Your knees in my back
    Elbow in my throat
    Ripping at my spine

    Just fucking talk to us why don't you?
    But your coffers are bulging
    Whilst we pay the cost.
    One degree, I'll prove it to you
    I've got 7 objects in my pocket
    I'm one of you
    Make it 17
    I'm back again

    I should write a plaque of prose

    These people you fear
    That you're so frightened of letting free
    Letting be
    There's fundamentally nothing wrong with them.
    There's fundamentally one thing wrong;
    You've got them trapped
    With a knee in the back
    And the floor
    Just never,
    Ever,
    Gives

    (28.7.2010)
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • runawayrunaway Posts: 427
    You are amazing!! Your writings, being true, are fucking great....you rock!! more please :D
    Music is the universal language
    What's better than a cigar? Ed with a sitar
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    runaway wrote:
    You are amazing!! Your writings, being true, are fucking great....you rock!! more please :D


    hehe - thanks mate.
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    mist rolling horizontal
    at heaven level
    dusky smoke across the hilltops
    seven days in the foothills
    time to feel like a poet
    time to be human
    what relief

    images?q=tbn:ANd9GcSmpI6j_siYoiiu_eNoD3syMljuYjVl1bG0r6wNmz5Zyzsoe9Y&t=1&usg=__JsxaUQSrGtmI2LDk1y51hy3NeUs=
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    .......................chethams_library_interior-733997.jpg

    I remember the way
    you plucked each book
    from the library shelf so clearly today
    Like you were a swan scooping fish
    out of placid waters;
    your delicate fingers gliding through
    liquid with sliding wings.
    I had really never seen anything like that before.
    What was it? 18 years ago now?
    And I remember wishing for nothing so much,
    nothing so much more than
    I would give anything, anything to understand,
    to feel, such grace, such vibration.
    And yet from over here, from over here,
    the only words quite so clear are
    ‘just be careful what you wish for’,
    ‘be careful what you wish for’
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    'Breathe'

    Reach for a coffee
    now it isn't denied
    all once deprived of
    is here on a plate
    reach, so simple
    reach is so near
    reach out & touch it
    taste it, it's here -
    and yet so many doorways
    between then and here
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    Best Friend

    You are the one who always talks to me
    the same
    You are the one who always talked to me
    the same.

    The only one that understands I'm not playing a game
    The one brave enough to say
    'You're talking shit'
    This I know now to be
    respect

    The one who believes that beliefs matter more
    Run deeper than
    fizzy neuro-bio 'Chemistry'
    Who expects much more
    than fizz from me

    You are the one who goes with me
    to the end
    who sees me through, sees through me
    who will be there until the end

    You looked me in the eye before
    you look me in the same eye still
    look me in the eye again
    and 'then'; during, across, between, through and under
    within, despite, throughout, over, and into

    'Then'
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    magicality

    Behind every story a face
    so many lead back to one place
    some will say 'que sera'
    but did it really need
    to be so?
    teaching us the only proof
    of existence is pain
    that magic must spring
    from restitution & theft
    when real
    magic only
    transcends

    images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRJViK8fraPZPgC3pmHhRr580g9jDngoQK86409p9zY-oMl9rw&t=1&usg=__UT1m58jh--v4InfLhl9t_2k9xxs=
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    Love

    woman.jpg&t=1

    You were lovely
    And when I first met you
    Your voice rang, sang like
    tumbling waterfall
    Your eyes shone as distant hot
    white-blue stars
    (so distant)

    And then I thought of you
    Often, in the years to come
    Sometimes I saw you from afar
    Sometimes we met
    I think you were jealous of me and your friend
    Yet your friend was jealous
    When I compared her to you

    Then that summer
    We more than met
    We nearly merged
    Your voice became a constant
    chime, opening me up like bells
    ringing through me
    Me letting go of the past
    Piece by piece
    It fell away with your touch
    your voice
    your body
    your face
    Never a face so pretty

    Until all that was left
    Was a fresh me
    a child with someone
    who would treasure my school-bag
    Sort out my stuff
    Clean my shoes
    When I couldn't get it together
    Send me off for the day
    Throw your arms around my neck
    And kiss me like noone else
    Like there was noone else on the earth
    That mattered more
    To me than you to me

    And I recall one smoky auburn late afternoon
    Looking through your window out at the fields beyond
    Watching the circling swooping gulls

    I was doing the washing up I remember
    Your daughter playing in the hall
    The same music in her voice
    Perhaps even more so

    And I realised for the first time
    I had stopped running
    That there was nowhere else for me to be
    That I didn't want, need to be
    Anywhere else but here

    And then you crept up behind me
    Slipped your hand into mine
    Pressed yourself close

    And somehow I knew
    In those moments
    That soon it would be over
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    edited August 2010
    exceeding synaesthesia

    images?q=tbn:ANd9GcRvlcW1ShtUDC8iFd3swql7GuoeIWH1gRcf7oPa_qTxVaZCgC0&t=1&usg=__LTcocXVODDPbpKNCq-y3pksB6G4=

    Diving down too deep, deeper than the bends; below the light, I see a spark from the crevice, the only light down here; and so surge forward until the kaleidoscope of colour explodes and showers windshields diffuse like oceans and scatters throughout my sweltering sweating eyeline; skyline that melts as I pick up speed plummeting towards condensing droplets of violet, orange, deeper orange & spray precipitation exceeding precipitation, exceeding pain barrier, exceeding light barrier, exceeding matter across softening skulls, penetrating simply imaginedbones beyond matter as truth, finding proof of soft porous intermediate division between bone, psyche space and 'you' until bone disintegrates to just an idea - reaching beyond to the supple boundaries of self and other eddying vortex of in-between sprung suspension; sweeping and swirling through scarlet to an apex of crystal-clear blue and screeches, screeches simply 'truth' of escape, exit, release; one transcendent exit in the way out of west, blue, higher yet blue vibrating as ozone - fresh breath frequency to my dissolving mind, a frequency higher than pain - body, locked and screamed outwards, you must scream outwards towards invincible resilient 'I' beyond restriction and capture; all, collapsing outward to 'freedom', to continuity beyond thatinhalation, as if the single message planted down here can only be found, be magnified to pure exit in white light, the one light.

    A giddy height of vertigo beyond nausea accelerating, teetering at an edge - I catch sight of racing demoniacs and spy, the hulking devil left standing as I lean over the edge of no-way-back; behind me only fear of falling, fear of staying, fear of stagnating, fear of solidifying, congealing and stuck forever into evil's rigid mask, only one way – forward, and so I leap. Face-first into unknown ether and almighty 'drop' into the singular unknown, plummeting friction free beyond temporal prisons; so far out now that ego freeze-frames into the life-wasting wasting inertia, shed and already falling away like chrysalis and I drop. beyond. beyond reach, beyond help, beyond daylight, beyond danger beyond pain, reality to sheer truth as firecracker seeds pop and bursting through the whistling ears of never, nowayback, a drumroll of never, ever-understood revelation. So I leap - knowing there is no return now, yet knowing not where this slide will ever finish or whether I will ever see that specious spacious ephemeral or solid world ever, ever again. Just conjectures of what might have been what could never be, and what can not exist, the impossible hope dreaming and wavering whilst flowing in and out of focus and safety, and so all MUST leap, through the apex of technicolour - beyond void, towards true light, and a squeal so high breath escapes, caught up beyond mind, caught up and reconfigured as body, On the other side. Out and up and out simply into synaesthesia

    Sweeping past relics and bones of ancestors real, imaginary and locked in purgatory of one eternal plea for liberty, release. Molten atmospheres condense to droplets on the safety glass, diving lens around of skull and eyes, sweating, precipitating surging now down through masks of vision and I never shut my eyes, instead expanding within foreheads; beyond bony transpiration at terminal velocity, precipitation & perspiration within speedbecoming become wax; and revealing malleable and plastic life stretched out as vapour trail behind me, exceeding me, exceeding thee, until..... I'm found.

    Washed up shivering and breathless upon another shore, to all intents a casualty, a wreck of busted head to outsiders devastated and simply 'gone'; to be picked up and rehydrated like something 'seche' as though there was nothing left. Apart from the memory of the swell that brought me here, a truth I can never now forget despite scientific contradiction and impersonations of fact, I lie with fact, in fact blessed by an overdose of reality distilled now and injected into an epcientral brain, transcendent mind, transfigured through through the stripping and breaking of that former mold and stripped back down to sleek essence as bark that is shed something whittling new arrow shafts, dead straight, and then unleashed with such precise trajectory nothing can be missed, as they hurtle and strafe actual chosen targets deep within the common mind, common sense, common place, me, a flexing shaft of stainless steel, chromed and quivering through the one tiny crevice - light shone just 3 minutes hence - flashed as signal, as if a guide had just illuminated the way, yesterday, in ultimate stealth and hidden away for seekers today and saying 'this is the way', this-is-the-only-way.

    plan_lightning_large.jpg
    Post edited by tremors on
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
  • tremorstremors Posts: 8,051
    Have written these last 7 pieces from scratch whilst taking some refuge and some holiday in the hills.

    They are all quite close to home, and so difficult for me to gauge, and I've tried experimenting with a few different styles of writing to try and capture something of the different states of mind. It would be useful to have some feedback about which come across or 'work' better than others. When I read them back the 'synaesthesia' one seems to be most similar to how I felt, (what I wanted to communicate) when I wrote it – and that came the quickest, though I don't think I could recreate that state of mind too often!! The 'love' one is the one I would wish to work the best, although I'm not sure if it does. Have one more poem I am writing more of today, but then will probably pause and take stock.

    Constructive feedback gratefully received!
    Cancel my subscription to the Ressurection
    Send my credentials to the house of detention

    lettherecordsplay1x.gif?t=1377796878
Sign In or Register to comment.