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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    A still night
    and I feel ripples
    A pebble tossed;
    Smooth circles peak
    and reach this yearning feeling
    A year passes
    More water under a bridge
    A year passes
    Finally, a year of stillness
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    Directions from the universe
    Taught by the heavens
    Too slow go too quick slow
    Refinement
    Daily
    Frantic blisters fading
    Chords chime, resound more clearly
    Church bells in the morning
    Strangers laughing
    More trusting
    Easing into paces that don't get worn out so easily
    Something speaking
    Something stirring
    Something living for something more than just surviving
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    Fractured splintered mind
    My personality
    In shards all over your floor
    Cuts both our feet to ribbons
    Both wounded, our wounds
    Slide into one
    Cracked up
    This injury gives us something
    at least
    Something to keep putting back together
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  • pandora
    pandora Posts: 21,855
    tremors wrote:
    A still night
    and I feel ripples
    A pebble tossed;
    Smooth circles peak
    and reach this yearning feeling
    A year passes
    More water under a bridge
    A year passes
    Finally, a year of stillness
    this is beautifully perfect t

    thank you!
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    pandora wrote:
    tremors wrote:
    A still night
    and I feel ripples
    A pebble tossed;
    Smooth circles peak
    and reach this yearning feeling
    A year passes
    More water under a bridge
    A year passes
    Finally, a year of stillness
    this is beautifully perfect t

    thank you!

    Many thanks, kind Pandora
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    Settled outside a cafe
    The music floating down the street
    Only too loud and a bit too sweet
    I think of nothing
    I've thought it all before
    Relief, memory, gratitude fatigue

    The foreign students, tourists,
    Walk down the middle of the road
    like they own the place
    The triumph of recovery fading
    To the smoothness of normal life

    And yet the sky excites me
    Threatening to do something
    Whistling something wilder
    Gathering blackness, inhospitality
    At least the sky still has no master
    And I most love England
    When the weather won't be tamed
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    Sheer drop
    No parachute
    Keep reciting
    Keep reciting
    something
    Nausea
    Pits within pits
    Never knowing
    Never knowing
    Blank
    Safer than defining
    Beyond
    Beyond the pale
    Beyond anything
    Shaking
    Beyond reason
    Kernels
    Finding something deeper
    Breathless
    Clinging to something anything
    Faith
    Breaking down to something
    To get you to tomorrow
    To get you past midnight
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  • PilateOfTheStorm
    PilateOfTheStorm Posts: 4,319
    wow, brilliant

    these poems in particular stood out - the imagery, so strong
    your style is really evident in these I think, they are great. some really vivid, powerful, intense stuff. my favourite thread of yours, i think it's your best stuff
    tremors wrote:
    Directions from the universe
    Taught by the heavens
    Too slow go too quick slow
    Refinement
    Daily
    Frantic blisters fading
    Chords chime, resound more clearly
    Church bells in the morning
    Strangers laughing
    More trusting
    Easing into paces that don't get worn out so easily
    Something speaking
    Something stirring
    Something living for something more than just surviving

    like those lines a lot, especially
    "directions from the universe" - i love that phrase
    made me think a lot, very powerful

    tremors wrote:
    Fractured splintered mind
    My personality
    In shards all over your floor
    Cuts both our feet to ribbons
    Both wounded, our wounds
    Slide into one
    Cracked up
    This injury gives us something
    at least
    Something to keep putting back together

    this created such an intense image in my head, reminded me of this painting:

    40400-5146511-7.jpg

    it's called Dysphoria, by an artist called Lizzie Rowe who, over the last few decades from the 80s I think, has visually recorded her journey from a man to a woman. Just everything about the painting - the identity, the confusion, the longing, the desperation, everything, stands out. Very strong, just like your poem.


    and then this one, love it, pretty perfect:
    tremors wrote:
    Settled outside a cafe
    The music floating down the street
    Only too loud and a bit too sweet
    I think of nothing
    I've thought it all before
    Relief, memory, gratitude fatigue

    The foreign students, tourists,
    Walk down the middle of the road
    like they own the place
    The triumph of recovery fading
    To the smoothness of normal life

    And yet the sky excites me
    Threatening to do something
    Whistling something wilder
    Gathering blackness, inhospitality
    At least the sky still has no master
    And I most love England
    When the weather won't be tamed

    Thanks tremors, great words :clap:
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    PilateOfTheStorm wrote:
    wow, brilliant

    these poems in particular stood out - the imagery, so strong
    your style is really evident in these I think, they are great. some really vivid, powerful, intense stuff. my favourite thread of yours, i think it's your best stuff
    tremors wrote:
    Directions from the universe
    Taught by the heavens
    Too slow go too quick slow
    Refinement
    Daily
    Frantic blisters fading
    Chords chime, resound more clearly
    Church bells in the morning
    Strangers laughing
    More trusting
    Easing into paces that don't get worn out so easily
    Something speaking
    Something stirring
    Something living for something more than just surviving

    like those lines a lot, especially
    "directions from the universe" - i love that phrase
    made me think a lot, very powerful

    tremors wrote:
    Fractured splintered mind
    My personality
    In shards all over your floor
    Cuts both our feet to ribbons
    Both wounded, our wounds
    Slide into one
    Cracked up
    This injury gives us something
    at least
    Something to keep putting back together

    this created such an intense image in my head, reminded me of this painting:

    40400-5146511-7.jpg

    it's called Dysphoria, by an artist called Lizzie Rowe who, over the last few decades from the 80s I think, has visually recorded her journey from a man to a woman. Just everything about the painting - the identity, the confusion, the longing, the desperation, everything, stands out. Very strong, just like your poem.


    and then this one, love it, pretty perfect:
    tremors wrote:
    Settled outside a cafe
    The music floating down the street
    Only too loud and a bit too sweet
    I think of nothing
    I've thought it all before
    Relief, memory, gratitude fatigue

    The foreign students, tourists,
    Walk down the middle of the road
    like they own the place
    The triumph of recovery fading
    To the smoothness of normal life

    And yet the sky excites me
    Threatening to do something
    Whistling something wilder
    Gathering blackness, inhospitality
    At least the sky still has no master
    And I most love England
    When the weather won't be tamed

    Thanks tremors, great words :clap:


    Thanks as always, for taking the time, and trouble to not only read my stuff, but to think about it, write about, and encourage me. It means a lot to me - thanks! I like the painting.



    But hey! You went and changed your name :( I liked the old one! Gonna have to get used to this - give me time! :D
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  • PilateOfTheStorm
    PilateOfTheStorm Posts: 4,319
    tremors wrote:

    Thanks as always, for taking the time, and trouble to not only read my stuff, but to think about it, write about, and encourage me. It means a lot to me - thanks! I like the painting.



    But hey! You went and changed your name :( I liked the old one! Gonna have to get used to this - give me time! :D

    it's no trouble at all! i love reading it and it naturally makes me think, just wanted to share my thoughts with you. very provocative (in a good way) and beautiful words
    the painting is cool, it was magnificent when i saw it at the gallery. huge and just the colours used, love it

    i did, got bored with the other one. i hated it :lol: don't know why I always end up picking that as a username but I felt that it needed to go. This one suits me better right now :D
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    PilateOfTheStorm wrote:
    tremors wrote:

    Thanks as always, for taking the time, and trouble to not only read my stuff, but to think about it, write about, and encourage me. It means a lot to me - thanks! I like the painting.



    But hey! You went and changed your name :( I liked the old one! Gonna have to get used to this - give me time! :D

    it's no trouble at all! i love reading it and it naturally makes me think, just wanted to share my thoughts with you. very provocative (in a good way) and beautiful words
    the painting is cool, it was magnificent when i saw it at the gallery. huge and just the colours used, love it

    i did, got bored with the other one. i hated it :lol: don't know why I always end up picking that as a username but I felt that it needed to go. This one suits me better right now :D


    Cool - the only problem with electricxlovex was it was quite hard to type! ;)

    So what can I call you for a nickname now then? Can't use electricx any more!
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    So I'm back in the town where I was stranded last year, with no money to my name. My wallet they'd taken from me. A good place to look for records - I go back to the cafe where I was shown a little kindness - order a veggie burger and chips, and a latte, and sit outside. It tastes real real good - but not as good as the biscuit I begged from them that day.
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  • PilateOfTheStorm
    PilateOfTheStorm Posts: 4,319
    tremors wrote:
    PilateOfTheStorm wrote:
    tremors wrote:

    Thanks as always, for taking the time, and trouble to not only read my stuff, but to think about it, write about, and encourage me. It means a lot to me - thanks! I like the painting.



    But hey! You went and changed your name :( I liked the old one! Gonna have to get used to this - give me time! :D

    it's no trouble at all! i love reading it and it naturally makes me think, just wanted to share my thoughts with you. very provocative (in a good way) and beautiful words
    the painting is cool, it was magnificent when i saw it at the gallery. huge and just the colours used, love it

    i did, got bored with the other one. i hated it :lol: don't know why I always end up picking that as a username but I felt that it needed to go. This one suits me better right now :D


    Cool - the only problem with electricxlovex was it was quite hard to type! ;)

    So what can I call you for a nickname now then? Can't use electricx any more!

    haha it's up to you :lol:
    definitely too much of a beast to type - what with all the x's
    don't know if this one's much easier but Oh well :lol:
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    PilateOfTheStorm wrote:
    tremors wrote:



    Cool - the only problem with electricxlovex was it was quite hard to type! ;)

    So what can I call you for a nickname now then? Can't use electricx any more!

    haha it's up to you :lol:
    definitely too much of a beast to type - what with all the x's
    don't know if this one's much easier but Oh well :lol:


    We'll find a way O' PilateOfTheStorm! ;)
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    I felt love
    I felt love
    In the whistling through the trees
    In the look of your face
    Tranquil
    Saw the world through different eyes
    Saw the heaven in the skies
    I knew love as I knew you
    I write this alone
    You, out there somewhere
    To send you a message
    To let you know
    I'll always take you back
    Send a message from the earth
    I spend my days waiting
    For the time I'll see you again
    Just a passing glance, a few words
    Send a message
    To tell you
    I still love you
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    When they strip you of everything but your music
    Remember that
    Your music will be enough

    When they sever you with days, weeks and months
    Know that
    Your music is enough
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  • PilateOfTheStorm
    PilateOfTheStorm Posts: 4,319
    tremors wrote:
    When they strip you of everything but your music
    Remember that
    Your music will be enough

    When they sever you with days, weeks and months
    Know that
    Your music is enough


    this is great, exactly how i feel. not just about music, but about your body, mind and soul too. and so many other things, like emotion, feeling, expression.

    your previous poem as well, i found it really lovely and different to your other works - the emotion and sensitivity is there as always, but there's this vulnerability that i found really touching.

    :clap: marvellous as usual
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    PilateOfTheStorm wrote:
    tremors wrote:
    When they strip you of everything but your music
    Remember that
    Your music will be enough

    When they sever you with days, weeks and months
    Know that
    Your music is enough


    this is great, exactly how i feel. not just about music, but about your body, mind and soul too. and so many other things, like emotion, feeling, expression.

    your previous poem as well, i found it really lovely and different to your other works - the emotion and sensitivity is there as always, but there's this vulnerability that i found really touching.

    :clap: marvellous as usual


    Thankyou! That previous one I did write in a different state of mind. It's not often I find myself pining for my lost true love - but from time to time I do! This time I wrote something down..... it seemed to help.
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  • pandora
    pandora Posts: 21,855
    tremors wrote:
    I felt love
    I felt love
    In the whistling through the trees
    In the look of your face
    Tranquil
    Saw the world through different eyes
    Saw the heaven in the skies
    I knew love as I knew you
    I write this alone
    You, out there somewhere
    To send you a message
    To let you know
    I'll always take you back
    Send a message from the earth
    I spend my days waiting
    For the time I'll see you again
    Just a passing glance, a few words
    Send a message
    To tell you
    I still love you
    beautiful tremors ... made me cry... fragile I am and it was perfect
    thank you I will keep and cherish :D
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    pandora wrote:
    beautiful tremors ... made me cry... fragile I am and it was perfect
    thank you I will keep and cherish :D


    Thanks Pandora - lots of love to you!
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