"OFF"

the wolf
the wolf Posts: 7,027
edited February 2011 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
the thorny flower
lay crumpled on the floor
drops of blood leaving a trail
to the backdoor
one in the chamber
safety in the "off" position
he took aim
and delivered
a volley of spoken death
she never knew what hit her
she called his name
but he was too far gone
he would hear her lies
no more
Peace, Love.

"To question your government is not unpatriotic --
to not question your government is unpatriotic."
-- Sen. Chuck Hagel
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  • BinauralJam
    BinauralJam Posts: 14,158
    :twisted: :clap:
  • zarocat
    zarocat Posts: 1,901
    That's intense man
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  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    Yes, very very powerful.

    You know wolf, I feared your last post 'Goodbye' might be something symbolic. Glad you've come back and hit us with this one!
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  • the wolf
    the wolf Posts: 7,027
    Symbolic only in the way of writing. I've been going through some major writers block.
    I've been writing every day,.. It all just sucks.
    Every area has been shit. I get a great idea for a song, and it just leaves me by the time I write the first verse.
    Poetry has been an absolute nightmare.
    Short Stories, I won't even try right now.
    Peace, Love.

    "To question your government is not unpatriotic --
    to not question your government is unpatriotic."
    -- Sen. Chuck Hagel
  • pepper
    pepper Posts: 155
    This poem is intense...I don't believe you that it all sucks.
    Writers block sucks though! What I find worse is when you have the images and ideas dancing around your head but they just won't leave....and land......somewhere!
    Keep writing.....your talent is real!
    Pepper- I am faith without religion, without bruised knees and pleas for forgiveness...
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    I guess it must go in waves. My work involves a lot of writing (not creative stuff mind!) and sometimes it just doesn't come, and other times it all flows fluently and doesn't stop. I tend to just try not to force the rough patches. Hope you are still enjoying life nonetheless - it's really warming up towards spring around my way now - was strolling in the park earlier - nice!

    Don't quite know what I'm trying to say - other than - good luck and I feel for you!

    ps - if the poem above is what comes out of a writer's block...... 8-)
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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    it totally comes in waves. Sometimes you cant string two words together to save your life... The next thing you know you listening some pj boot and youve got the first verse of something youre not quite sure of.
    I think even the 'shit' is worth something cause at least it means youre writing... Your mind is thinking... And that can only be a good thing.
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • zarocat
    zarocat Posts: 1,901
    catefrances wrote:
    it totally comes in waves. Sometimes you cant string two words together to save your life... The next thing you know you listening some pj boot and youve got the first verse of something youre not quite sure of.
    I think even the 'shit' is worth something cause at least it means youre writing... Your mind is thinking... And that can only be a good thing.

    I fuckin' second that
    1996: Toronto
    1998: Barrie
    2000: Montreal, Toronto, Auburn Hills
    2003: Cleveland, Buffalo, Toronto, Montreal
    2004: Boston X2, Grand Rapids
    2005: Kitchener, London, Hamilton, Montreal, Ottawa, Toronto
    2006: Toronto X2
    2009: Toronto
    2011: PJ20, Montreal, Toronto X2, Hamilton
    2012: Manchester X2, Amsterdam X2, Prague, Berlin X2, Philadelphia, Missoula
    2013: Pittsburg, Buffalo
    2014: Milan, Trieste, Vienna, Berlin, Stockholm, Oslo, Detroit
    2016: Ottawa, Toronto X2
    2018: Padova, Rome, Prague, Krakow, Berlin, Barcelona
    2022: Ottawa, Hamilton, Toronto
    2023: Chicago X2
    2024: New York X2
  • pandora
    pandora Posts: 21,855
    the wolf wrote:
    Symbolic only in the way of writing. I've been going through some major writers block.
    I've been writing every day,.. It all just sucks.
    Every area has been shit. I get a great idea for a song, and it just leaves me by the time I write the first verse.
    Poetry has been an absolute nightmare.
    Short Stories, I won't even try right now.
    :wave: All in the stars friend...it'll be back around :thumbup:
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    catefrances wrote:
    it totally comes in waves. Sometimes you cant string two words together to save your life... The next thing you know you listening some pj boot and youve got the first verse of something youre not quite sure of.
    I think even the 'shit' is worth something cause at least it means youre writing... Your mind is thinking... And that can only be a good thing.


    There's definitely a lot to said just for 'writing' - writing anything, like you say. I have found over the past year or so that just doing more writing - about anything, has really helped me move forward, and get my shit back together..... Gotta keep writing!
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  • mikalina
    mikalina Posts: 7,206
    Very good - Steve.

    I always enjoy your poetry... even when you have writers block. ;)
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  • PearlOfAGirl
    PearlOfAGirl Posts: 15,993
    mikalina wrote:
    Very good - Steve.

    I always enjoy your poetry... even when you have writers block. ;)
    I agree wholeheartedly Steve... :clap::clap::clap:

    Wish you were here...
    ♥~RIP Dad
  • Godfather.
    Godfather. Posts: 12,504
    WOW !! I'm speechless.

    Godfather.
  • mysticweed
    mysticweed Posts: 3,710
    damn
    fuck 'em if they can't take a joke

    "what a long, strange trip it's been"
  • The Porch is full of overweight jobless geeks
    The Porch is full of overweight jobless geeks Posts: 64
    damn....strong as a double tea bagged tea :) I hope the writers block has gone because i'd like more....please :P
  • PilateOfTheStorm
    PilateOfTheStorm Posts: 4,319
    intense, strong, powerful and vivid.

    agree with everyone else, writing comes in waves, to and fro.
    but the block, the wall, the obstacle in your journey to creative freedom will eventually disappear

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