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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    just as im sinking
    you reach in and
    push me under
    despite my strength
    i drown in your weakness
    yet you never stop to think
    that reaching for
    your need
    washes the darkness
    right over my head.
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    edited September 2010
    such a hard lesson
    or maybe im stubborn
    could it be you just dont listen
    when ask i you to leave me be
    itd make things so much easier
    for me. perhaps thats why
    you dont ever leave for good
    cause when you need me
    i wont be there. such a hard lesson
    ... maybe its yours and not mine to learn.
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    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    Some deep stuff here cate. I like the way you write, sometimes feels like my own thoughts flowing across my mind
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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    the voice of absence
    sometimes is louder
    than the pain of anger
    it screams from within
    dissolving the strongest will
    yet making it stronher still
    the silence of your absence
    speaks louder than any declaration
    or excuse ever could.
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • thesewordselope
    thesewordselope Posts: 781
    catefrances wrote:
    such a hard lesson
    or maybe im stubborn
    could it be you just dont listen
    when ask i you to leave me be
    itd make things so much easier
    for me. perhaps thats why
    you dont ever leave for good
    cause when you need me
    i wont be there. such a hard lesson
    ... maybe its yours and not mine to learn.

    And again, I love this. Thank you.
  • mikalina
    mikalina Posts: 7,206
    catefrances wrote:
    the voice of absence
    sometimes is louder
    than the pain of anger
    it screams from within
    dissolving the strongest will
    yet making it stronher still
    the silence of your absence
    speaks louder than any declaration
    or excuse ever could.


    I love this one Cate, seems like you're writing down my feelings. Thank you.
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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    she tells herself his absence is good...that even when hes present her habit of counting the days til he inevitably runs makes her weak... it has her questioning her trust in him... she blames him for yo yoing.. she blames herself for allowing it... he tells her to get on with her life... she tells him thats all she does... when he leaves thats all she does... she tells herself his absence is good... and tries not to say his presence would be better.
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • prism
    prism Posts: 2,440
    mikalina wrote:
    catefrances wrote:
    the voice of absence
    sometimes is louder
    than the pain of anger
    it screams from within
    dissolving the strongest will
    yet making it stronher still
    the silence of your absence
    speaks louder than any declaration
    or excuse ever could.


    I love this one Cate, seems like you're writing down my feelings. Thank you.

    mine as well...i can relate to the feelings in all of these. great work cate
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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    i said to you, please dont leave me hanging. you said you wouldnt... but you did.
    what kind of soul allows such disrespect?
    what lack of courage does it takes?
    what absolute gall it takes to reappear as if its all ok.
    i asked you all the questions and you said all the right things
    i guess after so long lying the words just fall from your lips
    you asked me what i wanted. what i needed
    and i told you as if it was important to you
    i said to you please dont leave me hanging
    yet once again you did.
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    tomorrow when it all begins
    i wont be there to see it end
    i dont know where it all went wrong
    but i suspect it started at hi
    defeated ive given all i had
    the bloodletting satiated your vampire thirst
    tomorrow when it all begins
    stand beside me
    but i wont be there
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    catefrances wrote:
    tomorrow when it all begins
    i wont be there to see it end
    i dont know where it all went wrong
    but i suspect it started at hi
    defeated ive given all i had
    the bloodletting satiated your vampire thirst
    tomorrow when it all begins
    stand beside me
    but i wont be there


    This stuff is getting deeper and deeper, darker and darker. I feel like saying 'good luck' though it may or may not be needed.

    This line - hit me like a punch

    'defeated ive given all i had'

    as did the last two
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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    im right
    youre wrong
    ive left you
    sucking on the godhead
    youll not learn
    nor will i
    ive left you
    yet you still sneak up from behind
    im wrong
    youre right
    im too illiterate
    to read the signs
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    reflected in the darkness
    mulitplied by sin
    everything you thought you were
    was just a place to begin
    you cant erase the history
    but you can build upon its death
    and when you stand and face it down
    only then will you begin
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    and when you stand and face it down
    only then will you begin
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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    yeah i think the last word need changing.


    reflected in the darkness
    mulitplied by sin
    everything you thought you were
    was just a place to begin
    you cant erase the history
    but you can build upon its death
    and when you stand and face it down
    only then will you be free
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • tremors
    tremors Posts: 8,051
    catefrances wrote:
    yeah i think the last word need changing.


    reflected in the darkness
    mulitplied by sin
    everything you thought you were
    was just a place to begin
    you cant erase the history
    but you can build upon its death
    and when you stand and face it down
    only then will you be free


    Actually I quoted it because it was may favourite line so far!! Kind of said everything I was feeling - so I didn't comment.... Sorry to disrupt your flow. Free is equally good. I loved it fine first time round tho!

    ps - I'm in awe of how you write often - hardly any changes, no punctuation - and yet almost every one of your verses hits home. Quite often is feels like 'consciousness' over poetry. Profound and powerful. Too good for comment usually
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  • catefrances
    catefrances Posts: 29,003
    sweep it all away
    stand on broken bones
    things said yesterday
    form the casket of your future
    sweep it all away
    reach down and hold the rib
    remember this
    where is it you came from
    but dont lose sight of
    where is it im going
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say

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