You Said

twin2
twin2 Posts: 894
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
You take it to the limit,
and push against the restraints.
Over time your point will be proven,
and their memories will be stained.

The dam will overflow,
come crashing on their heads.
Drowning with surprise,
they will remember what you've said.

They will live with regret,
and remember what you said.
They will wish the clocks reset,
and remember what you said.

When they're lying alone in their beds,
it will continue swimming in their heads.
And they can't help but remembering,
remembering what you said.
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  • libragirl
    libragirl Posts: 4,632
    :cool:

    I really like this.
    These cuts are leaving creases. Trace the scars to fit the pieces, to tell the story, you don't need to say a word.
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    Thank you. I'm glad.
  • decides2dream
    decides2dream Posts: 14,977
    just an aside...what is that song that starts with...you said....??? every time i see this thread title...i can *hear* it. or is it...she said...??? :confused: grrrrrrrrr...

    anyhoo - on topic - i really like this line...


    drowning with surprise


    it sounds both good and bad simultaneously to me, kinda like most of the stuff in life.
    Stay with me...
    Let's just breathe...


    I am myself like you somehow


  • eMMI
    eMMI Posts: 6,262
    When they're lying alone in their beds,
    it will continue swimming in their heads.
    And they can't help but remembering,
    remembering what you said.

    I like these lines.
    when I think about them, I'm 'they' and they're 'you'. :)
    was that understandable? :D
    I always think about the things people have said to me. I'm wondering things like, "why did he say it like THAT?" and so on.

    but all in all, the poem is great.
    it has a twin2 quality promise. :)

    oh, I'm not making any sense now. it's 03:45 AM here and I have to stay up til 07:00 AM!
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    eMMI wrote:
    When they're lying alone in their beds,
    it will continue swimming in their heads.
    And they can't help but remembering,
    remembering what you said.

    I like these lines.
    when I think about them, I'm 'they' and they're 'you'. :)
    was that understandable? :D
    I always think about the things people have said to me. I'm wondering things like, "why did he say it like THAT?" and so on.

    but all in all, the poem is great.
    it has a twin2 quality promise. :)

    oh, I'm not making any sense now. it's 03:45 AM here and I have to stay up til 07:00 AM!


    A "twin2 quality promise" eh? That's funny. Thanks!
  • eMMI
    eMMI Posts: 6,262
    twin2 wrote:
    A "twin2 quality promise" eh? That's funny. Thanks!

    yup. :)
    you're welcome! hopefully tomorrow when I wake up and read that post again, I'll still remember what I ment by that. :D
    no, just joking, of course I will! I mean that your poems are always good! :)
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • Righteous Jammer
    Righteous Jammer Posts: 509
    another good poem..I like this one too....
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    eMMI wrote:
    yup. :)
    you're welcome! hopefully tomorrow when I wake up and read that post again, I'll still remember what I ment by that. :D
    no, just joking, of course I will! I mean that your poems are always good! :)


    Thanks for the compliment. That really is a nice thing to say.
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    Thanks Poet. I'm glad you liked it.
  • eMMI
    eMMI Posts: 6,262
    twin2 wrote:
    Thanks for the compliment. That really is a nice thing to say.

    you are very welcome. :)
    what can I say, I'm a nice person! :D
    no, seriously, you're welcome! :)
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."

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