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Took The Bus
Being Enlightened
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It's a very comfy bus
Lots of cushy seats
I was listening to the radio
Reading a book
We stopped at the stops
People got off, people got on
Well, at one stop
An older lady fell getting off the bus
A young man and a middle aged lady
helped the fallen woman to her feet
Helped her over to a bench
The bus driver checked on the hurt woman
Then came back on the bus
And informed us that we'd be delayed
Some lady yelled out
"When will this bus be getting to my stop?"
All she cared about was herself
And then it spread like wildfire
All these people were complaining and bitching
And it donned on me
Ignorance is very contagious
I got off that bus and made my way to the next one
The fallen one was doing okay, she had a hurt ankle
I got on the next bus and turned my walkman way up
I didn't want to catch anything
Lots of cushy seats
I was listening to the radio
Reading a book
We stopped at the stops
People got off, people got on
Well, at one stop
An older lady fell getting off the bus
A young man and a middle aged lady
helped the fallen woman to her feet
Helped her over to a bench
The bus driver checked on the hurt woman
Then came back on the bus
And informed us that we'd be delayed
Some lady yelled out
"When will this bus be getting to my stop?"
All she cared about was herself
And then it spread like wildfire
All these people were complaining and bitching
And it donned on me
Ignorance is very contagious
I got off that bus and made my way to the next one
The fallen one was doing okay, she had a hurt ankle
I got on the next bus and turned my walkman way up
I didn't want to catch anything
Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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I like the story this tells.
the penalty for bus thievery can be quite severe.
you may be sentanced to fifteen years of running your hands over the bit of dried chewing gum under the bus seat.
INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
As long as I don't have to re-chew it!
We must all be enlightened............
that all depends on good behaviour
INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
bravo
i think i would only change this part to read like this:
I got off the bus
and made my way to the next one,
turned my walkman way up;
I didn't want to catch anything.
just because if you're already off teh bus you wouldn't know how the old lady is or what she hurt and i don't think this poem is about knowing what happened to her...it's about not caring about what happened to her so let the reader feel that way at the end...
just a suggestion
and suggestions are only good when someone suggests getting a drink or doing some drugs or having some sex...
Thanks Goulet! I actually thought about removing that line but I left it in because as I got off the bus she fell from, I asked her if she was OK & she said her ankle was hurting...and I then got on the next bus.
And although drinks, drugs and sex are my favorite suggestions, this is still a good one! I appreciate constructive criticism.
woo
get up, get down
GET OFF!!
INTER-FUCKING-MISSION!!!
Newcastle-Riverside 02/22/92!!!
E.rutherford New Jersey 01/06/06
Athens -Greece.survived !barely-
Wembley 18/06/07- no words- just smiles!
OK
Left, right
side to side
up, down
all around
wiggle it (just a little bit--'til it grooves!)
then GET OFF!
Turn around and do it again...
we've been missing you.
WOW! Thanks!
As much as I get the real meaning of this tale. It was still funny.