we can pull our eyes

DopeBeastie
DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
from our heads and place them on the table
from the table, they will see
they will see intensely-beautiful me
eyeless. senseless. and searching.

they will see the empty pen
and the ink that's smeared upon my chin
and they will giggle (cuz they can)
and they will talk and call me silly

my eyes are of my favorite things
brown paper packages
tied up in string


:)
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  • EvilToasterElf
    EvilToasterElf Posts: 1,119
    This poem is like the movie Beetlejuice, at first it really creeps you out, but later you see it's quite endearing.

    Two thumbs up, I quite liked it
  • twin2
    twin2 Posts: 894
    It made me smile.
  • grooveamatic
    grooveamatic Posts: 1,374
    one of my new favorites...ever.
    .........................................................................
  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    This is really, really good!!! It's smiling out of the screen at me. :) I love the last 3 lines and I'm going to be humming that tune all day now...

    "...when the dog bites,
    when the bee stings,
    when I'm feelin' sad,
    I simply remember my favorite things,
    and then I don't feel so bad..."

    :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    Because the images are clear I think it's one of your best recent poems.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • Righteous Jammer
    Righteous Jammer Posts: 509
    Love the ending. I read it over and over
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    great writing. Well done
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    thank you, each

    i wrote this in a moment of shell-shock... from ground zero, as it were. i had no idea what i wanted... but i knew i wanted to love, regardless. regardless of the shit that clogs our heart's drains...

    part of me wants to say what it's about
    and part of me wants to know why you guys like it. like... what's it mean to you... cuz that'd be cool to know

    but maybe it's just one of those things.

    much peace to poets
    though, i'm afraid that there'd be far less poetry
    without the hell that keeps us wishing for heaven.


    signs be rusted or new
    they all say, you... find you...









    thanks again,
    Rachel
  • Ms. Haiku
    Ms. Haiku Washington DC Posts: 7,390
    PastaNazi wrote:
    though, i'm afraid that there'd be far less poetry
    without the hell that keeps us wishing for heaven.
    I think you are right, whether for good or bad.
    There is no such thing as leftover pizza. There is now pizza and later pizza. - anonymous
    The risk I took was calculated, but man, am I bad at math - The Mincing Mockingbird
  • DopeBeastie
    DopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    the duality of humanity
    degrees of our insanity
  • Ali
    Ali Posts: 2,621
    "these are a few of my favorite things...."
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
    adv2005

    "Why do I bother?"
    The 11th Commandment.
    "Whatever"

    PETITION TO STOP THE BAN OF SMOKING IN BARS IN THE UNITED STATES....Anyone?

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