My Love Is An Echo

phishgod · February 2004

My Love Is An Echo

(For L.)

My love
is an
echo of
smiley laughter,
sparkly
bright
beaming
with bliss
joy and
dewy damp
as an
apple of
green, red
yellow, gold
(delicious).

Her being
rests now
inside me,
more soul
than flesh,
yet O! her
flesh is
enchantment
and promise
and as soft
as dogwood
flowers, or
cherry blossoms.

My love
has my heart
tucked away
deep inside
her sumptuous
breasts, and
our hearts
beating to
a single
drum that
others do
not hear.

Dolphina,
redhawk,
lion-kin
our genetic
force now
merged in
firelove-
sunquakes
trembling.
before dawn.

On this
third day
after her
departure,
the taste
of her
last kiss
lip gloss
lingers as
sweetness
upon my
lips, as
her honey
(clear)
still beckons
me towards
far western
beaches &
hummingbirds
dancing in
canyon breezes.

This is
my perfect
girl, coo
cooing in
night's rest
upon my
gnarly fur,
oh great
sea turtles
keep watch
over her
as she surfs,
oh dolphins
my cousins,
remind her
to breathe,
great hawk
cover her
sweet and
wobbly tail
feathers as
she proceeds
to making
of our
new life,
our lives
renewed
within each
Otter's swim.

O! My darling--
before there
was nothing &
now there is
so much
everything in
Life's journey,
for together,
our voices
may yet
change the
world as
known before.

My precious,
pillow yr
breasts, yr
dancing thighs
and your
pinkened lips
upon my
tendril shoot,
nourish and
feed me
with little
glimpses into
your soulworld,
for so few
have looked
there--and I
the first
to enter,
need your
own atlas
to guide
me in the
inner voyage
your subconscious
sea, large
previously
tumultuous, yet
calmed by
knowing I
AM WITHIN.

Late now--
I will go
and dream
some more
of you, yr
fine hair
and electric
eyes, your
cute as
a button
nose, ears,
teasing lightly
against belly
button flesh,
my breath
racing against
your loins
as stars
dancing around
an ever
changing moon.

You are,
by all
accounts,
remarkable.
You are
by all
accounts
my lover.
Patience
virtue, joy
bringer, the
echo inside
my heart.

--January 2, 2002
@pth

CranMalReign · February 2004

"My love is an echo" is great. I... just can't help but feel it doesn't belong with the rest of this poem. I get a feeling of loss, desolation, regret, emptiness, and coldness from the line, but the rest of the poem does not give me any such feelings.

But since the poem is over 2 years old, it's obviously not a work in progress, so to hell with my constructive criticism.

That being said: "sunquakes" is a great madeup word! Bravo!

Being Enlightened · February 2004

You are just so full of love! That's so amazing!

"our genetic
force now
merged in
firelove-
sunquakes
trembling.
before dawn"

----Oooooooooooooo!!! I just loved that!

cassia · February 2004

CMR~~~

my love is an echo....

i can see where the obvious association might be echo, as in loss or less-than...but IMAGINE

echo...as warm and fluid mirror,

ECHO as she loves deeply....Narcissus, gazing at his own beautiful reflection in the pond....

imagine a resonation of self....

a mirrorself responding in deep love echoes,
echoes
of beauty.....

in Greek, echo is sound....

but i do appreciate, that through usage, the term can have a certain feel.....

ahhh but again, envision,

some mystic yodeling

up in the pristine Alpine air.....

(i am the Echo, of which my lover speaks.....Ah...but NOw that i think of it ThereWas some sadness here....if i may take some reality liberty.......it was penned after i had to leave phishgod to go back to san diego for awhile, So perhaps you are Perceptive...)

cool: after re-reading, i CAN see that now, CMR....
and the myth is sad, our mountain nymph pining for Narcissus until only her voice remains.....

thanks for the close read....i know he appreciates all comments~~

ps. ps. ok not related, but phonetically, cool~~"eco" like ecology...can trace back to Greek "oikos" = Home

(that soooooo works for me)

PS PS {{{{{{{{{{BE}}}}}}}}

Being Enlightened · February 2004

Originally posted by cassia
PS PS {{{{{{{{{{BE}}}}}}}}

{{{{{{{{{{{{{cassia}}}}}}}}}}}}}}}!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

CranMalReign · February 2004

The beauty of good poetry... open to interpretation!

phishgod · February 2004

Thanks all for your reads and comments.
Yes CMR, subject to interpetation, but echoes
can reverb with tonality of their own force,
yes--happy/sad provides a certain yin/yang balance
and indeed, as C. notes, there was an overtone of sadness of
her departure, but the bliss echoes back in new found ways and poems.

Thank you, BE, for your continued support, and favorable reviews.

Darling C.,for you who know of what I speak most intimately (and who,fortunately, keeps returning, echo-like, in all respects my
One--yr so my gurl!

Sunquakes tremoring in the new dawn of morning,
wizards and goats beards all gnarly and bright,
echo my love returning to me, returning, returning--
never to leave again.

thanks all....

CranMalReign · February 2004

My dad calls my girlfriend "C".

That is all.

cassia · February 2004

{{{{{{{{{{goatphish}}}}}}}}}}}

you dapper lil satyr, you

mermie man supahstar~~~

~~~
C, CMR
see si
onLy
i'm
real-side
an
L

and phishy's P
(still !)

and really, I like it,
he calls me

M'lor

(so chivalrous, like m'lady, eh

)

GOATEES SO RULE

CranMalReign · February 2004

Well, I guess on the PJ message board, my chick's a Y.

She calls my daddy "Big K"

But I'm always Tim in real-side.

Or Timmy.

Or Timbo.

Or Timbalina.

Never CranMalReign.

Sometimes T, but only to some people.

Always huge.

cassia · February 2004

ok, so, to review: not, tiny tim
not thumbelina
but uh KONG
k sounds, ooh
so fun etically....
kawk

{{{{{{{{sorry, fishyang}}}}} just can't help mahself

ok, where's the mop

(clean this up!!! --note to self)

NO LOITERING IN THE POND

tinyqueen giggles

cassia · February 2004

phishgod was born in pittsburgh~

my pirate***************

not a penguin.......

and remember only two kinds of penguins
live in icy climes...........

GO WINGS

CranMalReign · February 2004

Originally posted by cassia
phishgod was born in pittsburgh~

my pirate***************

not a penguin.......

and remember only two kinds of penguins
live in icy climes...........

GO WINGS

Phishgod has gained a new respect from me.

Ah, the Steel City
Burgh of my birth

How I lament the lackadaisicalness
of once proud franchises.

The Bucs stopped here.
The Steel Curtain rusted away
The Pens ran dry

Alas. I weep.

The Red Wings are to hockey what the Yankees are to baseball what the Cowboys are to football what the Lakers are to basketball...

Big names, Big stars, Big money, Small club pilfering, Big bores.

(This may have changed a bit for some franchises... but they're all still just movie stars)

cassia · February 2004

movie stars that draw blood !!

whee,

geez ya shoulda seen wings v. avalanche
or what

(i'm new to hockey but finding it enjoyable...)
the occasional octopus

i love the hardcore checks and such...
our mr. chelios with his nose always busted up....

i think in hockey, the excellence in athleticism is much more evident than other sports (on a team basis, plus i like the speed and fluidity of the game, too)

but i must admit, one of my fav games of the season, was when almost 11 of our top players were out injured...and the 'farm kids' from grand rapids came over to play...(but with wings/even minor is topknotch) and the first time a little fellow scored a goal, was great................

FinsburyParkCarrots · February 2004

Phishgod:
your poem
is
by all accounts,
remarkable.

cassia · February 2004

and
and
accountants
are
remarkable
by all accounts...
especially ones
that
dance

FinsburyParkCarrots · February 2004

Originally posted by cassia
and
and
accountants
are
remarkable
by all accounts...
especially ones
that
dance

There's only one!

And she's beautiful....

cassia · February 2004

numbers, landscapes, fiscal responsibilities, feng shui !!
and oohlordy what can be done with flowerpower prints!!
and hula shades~~

FinsburyParkCarrots · February 2004

Landscapes? You mean as a bliss weaver, or does she paint as well? So do I....

cassia · February 2004

in "beauty bark"

CranMalReign · February 2004

Originally posted by cassia
movie stars that draw blood !!

whee,

geez ya shoulda seen wings v. avalanche
or what

(i'm new to hockey but finding it enjoyable...)
the occasional octopus

i love the hardcore checks and such...
our mr. chelios with his nose always busted up....

i think in hockey, the excellence in athleticism is much more evident than other sports (on a team basis, plus i like the speed and fluidity of the game, too)

but i must admit, one of my fav games of the season, was when almost 11 of our top players were out injured...and the 'farm kids' from grand rapids came over to play...(but with wings/even minor is topknotch) and the first time a little fellow scored a goal, was great................

Wings/Avs is always a good game, regardless my distaste for the Wings. I hate the Flyers more.

"our mr. chelios". I can forgive this for such a fledgling fan. Mr. Chelios is and always will be a Blackhawk in the hearts of hockey fans the world over.

Just as Mr. Bourque will be a Bruin and not a turncoat "give me a championship" Av.

As for your comments on hockey in general... rock on. Even for a Wings fan.

By the way... ever see the fight between Roy on the Avs and Osgood on the Wings? Nothing like a goalie fight!

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