The Inspiring - A poem written by me.

dan_alivedan_alive Posts: 123
edited August 2003 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
The Inspiring
by DB.

roads that i'm fighting
they're not receding
air that i'm breathing
i await the inspiring
belatedly moving away
the future is here
i'm just wanting it to appear
and i'll appear to stay away

the visions it seems
my soul appearing on TV
with no one breathing
shrinking down into seeds
i shout for them to move
the gas is seeping in
the thought too crude
i'm in no mood to let them in

revolting is the feeling
that i'm showing my back
but i leave some space
and wait to attack
life is changing forever
and now is relieving
tomorrow melts together
i have no time to be sleeping.
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"It is I, with the empty bladder!"

www.nowalletevolution.com
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  • BinFrogBinFrog MAPosts: 7,290
    Good stuff man
    Bright eyed kid: "Wow Typo Man, you're the best!"
    Typo Man: "Thanks kidz, but remembir, stay in skool!"
  • hey dan alive (: remember me???
    Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro
  • dan_alivedan_alive Posts: 123
    i do remember yer name for sure.. but haven't seen u for ages... my memory is lacking.. pm me and say ello :)
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    "It is I, with the empty bladder!"

    www.nowalletevolution.com
  • Originally posted by lifeisworth
    hey dan alive (: remember me???



    ELLO!!!


    it's been a good long while...

    took a wee break in the spring of this year...


    i really like this "poetry" page...


    feel
    i'm
    fighting
    my
    internet
    addiction
    again ;)




    um...


    yeah, the old place was hard for poets... i think this'll be great :)




    i wish we had access to the old pm's at least



    ah well


    time for new ones, i guess
    Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro
  • dan_alivedan_alive Posts: 123
    yeah this place feels a lil better and focused (if that's a good thing I dunno)...

    good to see ya again and lots of other oldies especially... i had a diff name on the previous bbs so i thought i'd re-establish some sort of rhythm with this one...

    hope ur doing ok :)
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    "It is I, with the empty bladder!"

    www.nowalletevolution.com
  • hey, yeah... i'm doing fine... thanks

    did you see the OZ shows?


    wanna share what your name was on the last board? i felt kinda like a newbie there, no big surprise with all my 300 posts... oh, and i forgot my password for like, forever... so...







    .
    Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro
  • nicely done.
    i like it.
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  • dan_alivedan_alive Posts: 123
    thanks, winded sailor man... :)

    ___

    lifeisworth... yeah i was a bit of a newbie too... the name's a secret tho.. nah, i was scarlet_letterman. didn't post much at all, it had a bad vibe to it and it didn't appeal much to me...

    this place feels better

    i went to 5 aussie shows... 3 in Melb, 1 in adelaide, 1 perth (front row!!).. fucken great experience.. 5 shows in 7 days.. i was sick for two weeks after it lol.. :) dancing, singing etc etc

    U.S shows?
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    "It is I, with the empty bladder!"

    www.nowalletevolution.com
  • i just didn't like doing poetry there...

    and it was hard to find other's stuff, too...


    cool on the shows :)
    Nosotros nunca escuchamos la voz adentro
  • Originally posted by dan_alive
    thanks, winded sailor man... :)

    ___

    lifeisworth... yeah i was a bit of a newbie too... the name's a secret tho.. nah, i was scarlet_letterman. didn't post much at all, it had a bad vibe to it and it didn't appeal much to me...

    this place feels better

    i went to 5 aussie shows... 3 in Melb, 1 in adelaide, 1 perth (front row!!).. fucken great experience.. 5 shows in 7 days.. i was sick for two weeks after it lol.. :) dancing, singing etc etc

    U.S shows?

    hey, scarlet_letterman...i didn't know that was you! good to see you again.
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  • setaside2setaside2 Posts: 1,084
    dan:

    good stuff. I wish I could be as lyrical. You have rhythm and assonance like no other in this piece.

    Excellent dark undertow. I am officially a fan. Thanks.
    I'm stepping in front of the gushing hydrant in a hurricane. I'd like to see the traction I keep.
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