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jackdoc13

oh you've done it so smart
you played dice with my heart
you've sailed off and left me
still docked ashore
and that's what you're good for
a ship in my sights
a bird without flight
a single thought that makes me toss and turn all night
so dry are my eyes
i am deaf to your cries
so sick of being surprised
that is the price i pay
for lack of control
my drawing is crude
and my depiction of you
seems to be designed to let my incompetence shine through
a step stool's what i use
to fight the confused
but what i need is always one level
higher than i choose
cause you keep them so high
the thoughts that hide in your mind
hell i cant even see past your black and white eyes
so i will cut all my ties
that keep me on the ground
and i will slay any thought that escapes out my mouth
cause i am perfectly prosed
a perfection unknown
everything that i hold, i will hold alone
i will be the light in your life
although forever out of sight
although never seen
i will appear in the space after your dream -- but before you awake
and your hand i will take
so you make no mistake
i will guide you along this meandering path of fate
a side-story to life
but i will make sure i walk right past
and i wont even glance
cause i know that the next look could be my last