the sun also burns

walden freeman
walden freeman Posts: 511
edited December 2008 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
some say the impoverished
are lazy
or like to cut corners
but i disagree
because i witnessed
two poor children
fighting over the crust
of a missing sandwich
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  • ClutchTheDawn
    ClutchTheDawn Posts: 160
    very few words, to make a very good point
  • Dylan Stone
    Dylan Stone Posts: 1,145
    Too bad your future is so bleak... ;)

    :)
  • MakeMeCry43
    MakeMeCry43 Posts: 355
    Ooh I really like this one, a very few words but it's incredible how in those few words you managed to make this cut-throat effect, like a straight forward way of expressing things, I hope that made sense haha, but hey keep up the great job :)
    "Does anyone remember laughter?"

    "Where's Mike McCready? My god he's been ate!"

    "If you're an Elvis fan, there's no explanation necessary; if you're not, there's no explanation possible."

    "Sometimes God makes perfect people and Paul Newman was one of them." - RIP Paul Newman
  • Bu2
    Bu2 Posts: 1,693
    One of your best.
    Feels Good Inc.
  • walden freeman
    walden freeman Posts: 511
    This Walden Freeman guy pisses me off.

    I'm going to attempt another reading of my pomes this week, possibly in Philly.

    Let's hope I don't get booed off the stage before I even get halfway through my first poem, like last time.

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