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chadwick

johnny america wrote:

i wonder if my poems argue with one another when i close my notebook

if 'porcupine earth' and 'to the debris! now rafts' argue over
the rights to describing my obsession with driving alone

or if 'world piece' and 'songwriters' debate over whose opening line
is better

or even if 'impostor's creed' is in some sort of property dispute
with 'hymn for her' over whose weeds are growing
into whose garden, etc.

they are, of course, on consecutive pages

i wonder if jotting this poem down into that notebook might ease some of the tension
if the other poems will read this one and learn a valuable lesson
realizing that they each earned their page and their place in my heart

or maybe this poem will simply cause more tension

"why does [untitled] get to criticize the rest of us?"
asked 'quarter century blues'

maybe this particular poem will get a big head
and start judging the other poems

or maybe, my poems don't say a word

johnny america...
you are something else.

Chip McFlennigan

chadwick wrote:

johnny america wrote:

i wonder if my poems argue with one another when i close my notebook

if 'porcupine earth' and 'to the debris! now rafts' argue over
the rights to describing my obsession with driving alone

or if 'world piece' and 'songwriters' debate over whose opening line
is better

or even if 'impostor's creed' is in some sort of property dispute
with 'hymn for her' over whose weeds are growing
into whose garden, etc.

they are, of course, on consecutive pages

i wonder if jotting this poem down into that notebook might ease some of the tension
if the other poems will read this one and learn a valuable lesson
realizing that they each earned their page and their place in my heart

or maybe this poem will simply cause more tension

"why does [untitled] get to criticize the rest of us?"
asked 'quarter century blues'

maybe this particular poem will get a big head
and start judging the other poems

or maybe, my poems don't say a word

johnny america...
you are something else.

justam

chadwick

johnny america wrote:

chadwick wrote:

johnny america wrote:

i wonder if my poems argue with one another when i close my notebook

if 'porcupine earth' and 'to the debris! now rafts' argue over
the rights to describing my obsession with driving alone

or if 'world piece' and 'songwriters' debate over whose opening line
is better

or even if 'impostor's creed' is in some sort of property dispute
with 'hymn for her' over whose weeds are growing
into whose garden, etc.

they are, of course, on consecutive pages

i wonder if jotting this poem down into that notebook might ease some of the tension
if the other poems will read this one and learn a valuable lesson
realizing that they each earned their page and their place in my heart

or maybe this poem will simply cause more tension

"why does [untitled] get to criticize the rest of us?"
asked 'quarter century blues'

maybe this particular poem will get a big head
and start judging the other poems

or maybe, my poems don't say a word

johnny america...
you are something else.

justam

Confident is one word that might fit.

Chip McFlennigan

I of course wrote a poem in response to Chad, which validated the last line of the previous poem.

Oh, I'm fucking clever. A real cutie pie.

chadwick

johnny america wrote:

I of course wrote a poem in response to Chad, which validated the last line of the previous poem.

Oh, I'm fucking clever. A real cutie pie.

what? which?
im screwed up, dude.
help a brutha out

Chip McFlennigan

Looks like victory is mine, Chaddy!

THIS TIME.

chadwick

johnny america wrote:

Looks like victory is mine, Chaddy!

THIS TIME.

i'll get you johnny america
i'll get you

FinsburyParkCarrots

justam wrote:

Mr. Finsbury, have you been writing any lyrics lately? :geek:
You've been quiet for so long!

I've been writing, but not in English...

justam

FinsburyParkCarrots wrote:

justam wrote:

Mr. Finsbury, have you been writing any lyrics lately? :geek:
You've been quiet for so long!

I've been writing, but not in English...

I'd love to hear how that sounds. Has it had an influence on the type of subjects you're focused on?

chadwick

inscribed
but i am not stone
broken
not together

glass
combined with a melted sun
this
my song so stellar

i have no guitar
no pen
only you i have
only you i have

in the end
we trade places with nothing
and it falls behind us

StillHere

tremors wrote:

StillHere wrote:

tremors wrote:

currently wondering if finsburyparkcarrots is the longest serving active member of this community. Certainly the only one I remember from those older days. Respect - keep on keeping strong!!

that's because we goof up and then have to change our names
many of us have been around a while
but didn't "join" until 2003...even though when i let my acc lapse they only allowed me to have back to 2005
prob same for others
so you and landed here at about the same time, eh?
i think maybe as we grow older, we get into different things, such as poetry for example, we run into different groups of folks that we may not have met earlier.
???

same name since 1999! still have plans for world domination......

(think my membership lasped one year whilst I was otherwise engaged)

otherwise engaged? hmmm...interesting..but then, isn't everything you say? a real mystery to behold

world domination...i think you're close...very close (*cowers in the corner...but still reads the poetry)

StillHere

tremors wrote:

the wolf wrote:

I'll leave work in 11 minutes,
and not hear my own voice until i return to work on monday.

this makes me sad

it is sad to me too

but is it sad for you wolf?
or is this what you wait all week long for?
one never knows what's in another's heart and head

StillHere

chadwick wrote:

Radar upright directionals
darting across my yard
each muscle glistened in brilliance
past me standing still
if I remember correctly

And the other half flew the distance
of living out fire beyond before
they only say it once

I’ve said to forests
what I’ve said to no one

"I’ve said to forests
what I’ve said to no one"

that about sums up life doesn't it?
sad, truth, loneliness, secrets, love unspoken, unheard, the soul shall be broken, if not for the forest
absolutely ..... absolutely.... well...i can't find the right word for it..but i love it, really do

Chip McFlennigan

to get to heaven


if i could
be around you
your belt could be my bible

while the holy trinity plays
connect the dots
to hold starry pants high

navy blue backgrounds
construction paper kings
drawn with crowns

kindergarten mispronunciations

and the phone rings
a bell that cracks over and over and remains
the sound i hear climbing ladders

if i could

DangDang

chadwick wrote:

inscribed
but i am not stone
broken
not together

glass
combined with a melted sun
this
my song so stellar

i have no guitar
no pen
only you i have
only you i have

in the end
we trade places with nothing
and it falls behind us

this reminds of about 3 or maybe 4 Grateful Dead song lyrics combined

tremors

StillHere wrote:

tremors wrote:

same name since 1999! still have plans for world domination......

(think my membership lasped one year whilst I was otherwise engaged)

otherwise engaged? hmmm...interesting..but then, isn't everything you say? a real mystery to behold

Otherwise engaged - probably meaning 'involuntarily detained at her majesty's pleasure' -( not that place, the other place - our special place. known to only a privileged few). I'm full of mystery until you know what I'm talking about - then I'm clear as the bloody daylight!!

Things are picking up round here - there's sizzling poetry cropping up on every corner - people fucking, fighting and forgetting out on mainstreet - posters are being exchanged hand over fist for vintage vinyl. I'm mellow on green tea, cigarettes and the history of island records lp (1962-1987)-right now it's the israelite:s - getting nostalgic for the time when people other than pearl jam gave a shit about music - and for once I'm spoilt for choice about which thread to post in! It's a rock and roll sunday indeed

StillHere

DangDang wrote:

chadwick wrote:

inscribed
but i am not stone
broken
not together

glass
combined with a melted sun
this
my song so stellar

i have no guitar
no pen
only you i have
only you i have

in the end
we trade places with nothing
and it falls behind us

this reminds of about 3 or maybe 4 Grateful Dead song lyrics combined

brokedown palace
stella blue
ripple
what did you have in mind?

StillHere

tremors wrote:

StillHere wrote:

tremors wrote:

same name since 1999! still have plans for world domination......

(think my membership lasped one year whilst I was otherwise engaged)

otherwise engaged? hmmm...interesting..but then, isn't everything you say? a real mystery to behold

Otherwise engaged - probably meaning 'involuntarily detained at her majesty's pleasure' -( not that place, the other place - our special place. known to only a privileged few). I'm full of mystery until you know what I'm talking about - then I'm clear as the bloody daylight!!

Things are picking up round here - there's sizzling poetry cropping up on every corner - people fucking, fighting and forgetting out on mainstreet - posters are being exchanged hand over fist for vintage vinyl. I'm mellow on green tea, cigarettes and the history of island records lp (1962-1987)-right now it's the israelite:s - getting nostalgic for the time when people other than pearl jam gave a shit about music - and for once I'm spoilt for choice about which thread to post in! It's a rock and roll sunday indeed

I especially appreciated the WIP series in the early to mid seventies....yes, I'm old...but I was young then
Yes, you are a mystery....someday perhaps I will understand. Until then, I'm enjoying the mystique.