My writing head is stuck up my ass.

chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
edited September 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
To write, I can not.
Thoughts fragmented across this day.
Lately, I felt it that way.
Here, I can not stay.
Bodily fluids running on dying cells beneath my flesh.
I feel I am vaporizing like water.
Pen wanting to be in this hand, I can not hold onto the flowing ink stick.
Over-worked under both skies, my eyes.
Sunshine morning salmon with lunar road beams nightly lead me onward.
To write, I can not.
for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

"Hear me, my chiefs!
I am tired; my heart is
sick and sad. From where
the sun stands I will fight
no more forever."

Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
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  • Just wanted to say your post title atleast made me chuckle today : )
    TY!
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    flutteron wrote:
    Just wanted to say your post title atleast made me chuckle today : )
    TY!

    Glad I could help ya out in the chuckles department.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • brain of cbrain of c Posts: 5,213
    writers write. just do it. everyday. you don't have to publish the stuff you don't like.
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    To touch your beautiful face like clouds at Machu Picchu, I long to.
    Come lay with me among a lush earth of emerald grasses and wild horses running spirits.
    Tomorrow I will bring you a new morning dawn, you will give me the moon tonight.
    We intertwine ourselves weaving through the intergalactic root systems of time.
    Grains of sand build dreams in our pillows hourglass as we drift away.
    Gracefully flowing around me your hair is my river taking me out to an open sea.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    chadwick wrote:
    To touch your beautiful face like clouds at Machu Picchu, I long to.
    Come lay with me among a lush earth of emerald grasses and wild horses running spirits.
    Tomorrow I will bring you a new morning dawn, you will give me the moon tonight.
    We intertwine ourselves weaving through the intergalactic root systems of time.
    Grains of sand build dreams in our pillows hourglass as we drift away.
    Gracefully flowing around me your hair is my river taking me out to an open sea.

    Whoops.
    This was to be it's own thread thingy.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    brain of c wrote:
    writers write. just do it. everyday. you don't have to publish the stuff you don't like.

    That's what the Internet is for, yes. Publishing stuff no fucker even reads, let alone likes. That's its beauty. It's like vanity publishing, without the royalty cheques. You might get the odd


    I liked this. :)

    But you know damn well the fucker never read it, because they replied to it two minutes after you posted it.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Oh, and don't trust constructive criticism on the Internet, either. No-one analyses a text properly unless (a) they're studying criticism seriously, with a view to getting paid in the subject as an academic, or (b) they're a paid academic. Anyone else is (a) flattering you with an ulterior motive, (b) daming you with faint praise or (c) engaging in a passive aggressive exercise in laughing at the futility of all expressive endeavour.
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    I should have said, "damning", but I think Sally Field's minder censored me. ;)
  • gue_bariumgue_barium Posts: 5,515
    Oh, and don't trust constructive criticism on the Internet, either. No-one analyses a text properly unless (a) they're studying criticism seriously, with a view to getting paid in the subject as an academic, or (b) they're a paid academic. Anyone else is (a) flattering you with an ulterior motive, (b) daming you with faint praise or (c) engaging in a passive aggressive exercise in laughing at the futility of all expressive endeavour.
    or
    d) trying to work up the nerve to post some of their poetry.

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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    Oh, and don't trust constructive criticism on the Internet, either. No-one analyses a text properly unless (a) they're studying criticism seriously, with a view to getting paid in the subject as an academic, or (b) they're a paid academic. Anyone else is (a) flattering you with an ulterior motive, (b) daming you with faint praise or (c) engaging in a passive aggressive exercise in laughing at the futility of all expressive endeavour.

    I don't think constructive criticism is a good idea in a situation like this. No one is claiming to be professional, it seems to be mood, emotion, & thought sharing instead.

    It's more appropriate to use concert etiquette in a situation like this...you only say something if you have something nice or positive to say, otherwise...a zipped lip is better!
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  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    This poetry forum's very, very much better than many, really. Some out there are bloody horrible. Fledgling writers get torn to bits by so-called experts with no real credentials.
  • gue_bariumgue_barium Posts: 5,515
    This poetry forum's very, very much better than many, really. Some out there are bloody horrible. Fledgling writers get torn to bits by so-called experts with no real credentials.

    What doesn't kill ya makes you stronger.
    So the saying goes.

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  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    justam wrote:
    I don't think constructive criticism is a good idea in a situation like this. No one is claiming to be professional, it seems to be mood, emotion, & thought sharing instead.

    It's more appropriate to use concert etiquette in a situation like this...you only say something if you have something nice or positive to say, otherwise...a zipped lip is better!

    Yes Justly I'd say you're right.
    I was merely stating a fact about my mood, emotion here lately.
    I am quite overloaded with work these days.
    I just did my time-card today at work.
    I am getting the average of 80 hrs a week.
    Hard to write under that kinda work enviroment.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    gue_barium wrote:
    What doesn't kill ya makes you stronger.
    So the saying goes.

    I guess anything's better than indifference, in the end.
  • gue_bariumgue_barium Posts: 5,515
    I guess anything's better than indifference, in the end.

    ja, mon.

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