Lunar mountain highway.

chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
edited August 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
She is moon mountain air riding highways.
Known well in full beauty.
Lunar dances on this flesh.
Galactic skies, tattooed eyes.
Rolling fine elegance dreams of silken magical lips, circum holding winds.
Going onward, somewhere tired gliding clouds are matching rhythmic heart beats with metallic harmony.
Follow endlessly, female moon revolutions, again.
Tonight mighty traveler, she is only the night.
for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

"Hear me, my chiefs!
I am tired; my heart is
sick and sad. From where
the sun stands I will fight
no more forever."

Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    chadwick wrote:
    She is moon mountain air riding highways.
    Known well in full beauty.
    Lunar dances on this flesh.
    Galactic skies, tattooed eyes.
    Rolling fine elegance dreams of silken magical lips, circum holding winds.
    Going onward, somewhere tired gliding clouds are matching rhythmic heart beats with metallic harmony.
    Follow endlessly, female moon revolutions, again.
    Tonight mighty traveler, she is only the night.

    I'd really like to see "magical" changed to "magic"... like

    silken magic lips, circum holding winds

    making less description of more things :)

    an interesting piece, chadwick. i like it till it gets kinda hokey with the "mighty traveller" bit in the last line.


    but very nice, still

    thanks
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    why i smile after making such an assinine statement is beyond me...

    i'll require a bit of latitude in that
    i'm braindead








    :D
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    you are fine..
    that wasn't an ass-inine statement..
    you're not braindead at all..
    and thank you..
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
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