Eye For An Eye

BrainofdzBrainofdz Posts: 1,617
edited March 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Caught in a cycle
he tries not to breathe
One false move and he can feel the fury
rising, spinning like a whirling dervish
She never loved him,
of that he was sure
and he showed his love with the back of his hand
Just like his father before him
"Gotta show em who's boss"
But in the morning light,
he'd come to realize what he'd done
and pulled out his smith and wesson
for a taste of his own medicine
"Stunned by my own reflection, It's looking back, sees me too clearly and I swore I'd never go there again, Not unlike a friend that politely drags you down,down,down"

When you see me on the street, yell out "FAVO!!!"

I've been to alot of Pearl Jam shows;So fucking what.
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  • NothingbetterNothingbetter Wichita, KS Posts: 570
    Very interesting.

    The last half really peaked my intrigue...especiall about how his father had done the same. Tragic cycle.
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  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    nicely done, i like it..flowing sadness written..to bad some ppl live that..
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • JamalJamal Posts: 2,115
    Very nice

    I especially like the first half
    The second half is a little too concrete for me

    Overall though, I like it
    Surf little waves big... Charge big waves hard

    - Antwerp '06, Nijmegen '07, Werchter '07
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