Feedback on my song/poem 'Free'
sachinc
Posts: 117
This is my first song/poem post so i'm keen 2 get as much feedback as i can.
Make it scream
So I can't hear
What they have to say to me.
Let me fade
Away again
Let me leave this world behind.
Slowly slip
Far from here
Never stop to think again.
Steadily
Catch my breath
Paranoia grows inside.
Drown it out
Beat it back
Set...me...free
These things i should never hear
Coming back to torture me.
Set...me...free
Set...me...free
Make it scream
So I can't hear
What they have to say to me.
Let me fade
Away again
Let me leave this world behind.
Slowly slip
Far from here
Never stop to think again.
Steadily
Catch my breath
Paranoia grows inside.
Drown it out
Beat it back
Set...me...free
These things i should never hear
Coming back to torture me.
Set...me...free
Set...me...free
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