ducktape

henrocchenrocc Posts: 14
streets are Russian roulette with points spread.

victims are held down and force fed

go to school with danger

reason with human behavior

identities are passed around

i.p. addresses are hunted down

and the sounds that I seem to choke on

are the memories that I got broke on

arguments

referencing what the fuck do we do now?
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  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    This is refreshingly clear and open.

    As for what we do now?

    Welcome to the Forum! :)
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • henrocchenrocc Posts: 14
    thanks
  • chadwickchadwick up my ass Posts: 21,157
    i like it.
    thanks for sharing it.
    for poetry through the ceiling. ISBN: 1 4241 8840 7

    "Hear me, my chiefs!
    I am tired; my heart is
    sick and sad. From where
    the sun stands I will fight
    no more forever."

    Chief Joseph - Nez Perce
  • Bu2Bu2 Posts: 1,693
    May I call you Hen? I like to post angry political poetry as well, sometimes, and I welcome your piece because it's right to the point and it's well written.

    One thing, though...I'm not sure you meant the title to be a pun or not. Usually, it's spelled duct tape. So if you meant duck tape, as a twist, then that's cool. Otherwise, it should be duct.

    Again, it's great work. I look forward to seeing more. Please don't take my critique harshly, I'm just anal about spelling (when I'm not drunk, that is).

    Peace,
    Bu
    Feels Good Inc.
  • henrocchenrocc Posts: 14
    Thanks, I enjoyed Blood Drenched Stars as well.
  • henrocchenrocc Posts: 14
    Thank You. It is not a pun, it is misspelled, and I'm always drunk!:-)
  • Bu2Bu2 Posts: 1,693
    henrocc wrote:
    Thank You. It is not a pun, it is misspelled, and I'm always drunk!:-)

    just ducky!
    Feels Good Inc.
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