beautiful lonely girl

Perceptual
Perceptual Posts: 200
edited January 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
This is about someone who means a lot to me. As far as I know she doesn't exist. If she does... tell her I love her.


she just wanted to be a friend
a friend to anyone who would have her
the people she sees day to day don't mean to look away
it's just that in their eyes she's invisible, she's not there
she's been lonely too long and her heart is impaired
feels like she's living in a ghost town full of strangers

and she cries when no-one tries to know her
in a sea of people, her loneliness surrounds her

she just wanted to make a friend
but it's harder when you hide yourself away
the people ignore her 'cause they're full up on friends
regret will be surfaced when she takes to the end
she's giving her love but there is no return
feels like she's loving a ghost town full of strangers

and she cries when no-one tries to know her
in a sea of people, her loneliness surrounds her
it drowns her
resounds her
the aura.................around her
her soul..................beautiful
her love..................given up
her heart................falls apart
"this one, anytime I say love if you wanna say love, uh, say it, and if you say it you might as well say it loud, and if you don't feel like sayin' it, don't say it, but if you feel it, certainly say it..."

NOTE: Everything I write in the P,P&M section are intended to be songs, not poetry.
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  • Jamal
    Jamal Posts: 2,115
    wow, i very much enjoyed this
    thank you for sharing

    and, I'll tell her if I meet her ;)
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  • gus stills
    gus stills Posts: 378
    i like it
  • FinsburyParkCarrots
    FinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    This rocks.
  • IlovveePJ
    IlovveePJ Posts: 145
    Wow.
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  • coachchris
    coachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    Very touching and beautiful thanks for sharing!
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  • DOSW
    DOSW Posts: 2,014
    Oh man, I've known that feeling for so long now. The feeling that you want to save someone with your love, and in turn be saved yourself by her's. If only it could happen.
    It's a town full of losers and I'm pulling out of here to win
  • Perceptual
    Perceptual Posts: 200
    DOSW wrote:
    Oh man, I've known that feeling for so long now. The feeling that you want to save someone with your love, and in turn be saved yourself by her's. If only it could happen.

    YOU GOT IT!!!!!!!!!! YOU GOT IT!!!!!!!!!

    I'm ever so happy! Thank you everyone. Your comments fill me with joy.

    You're right DOSW, if only it could happen. It's just too bad a girl who could love me is the type of girl who doesn't exist... ever.
    "this one, anytime I say love if you wanna say love, uh, say it, and if you say it you might as well say it loud, and if you don't feel like sayin' it, don't say it, but if you feel it, certainly say it..."

    NOTE: Everything I write in the P,P&M section are intended to be songs, not poetry.
  • genie
    genie Posts: 2,222
    That is heartfelt poem, Perceptual.

    Without going into details, there are times i can relate to that poem.....
  • pacifier
    pacifier Posts: 1,009
    Perceptual wrote:
    This is about someone who means a lot to me. As far as I know she doesn't exist. If she does... tell her I love her.

    She used to exist in me but now I know what it is to love and be loved and I will never be lonely again. Thanks for sharing, I'm sure there are many people who feel this way.
  • Buru
    Buru Posts: 8,473
    DOSW wrote:
    Oh man, I've known that feeling for so long now. The feeling that you want to save someone with your love, and in turn be saved yourself by her's. If only it could happen.

    You def got it.

    I like the sentiment in the poem, and can relate to it.
    It's is sad and wistful (and heartfelt)

    My hopefully constructive criticism would be that (to me) some of the verses are too obvious (cliche)
    I feel there is not much left to mystery or interpretation
    Regardless, it works. :)

    It is just my humble opinion, we each have our own style, I don't want to sound like I know better, because I don't.
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  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    Jamal wrote:
    wow, i very much enjoyed this
    thank you for sharing

    and, I'll tell her if I meet her ;)

    diddo

    this is superb!!!!
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key

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