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instincts

PerceptualPerceptual Posts: 200
edited February 2007 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
you know
all of the darkest secrets
and the
bigger the harder to keep 'em
as you know

so don't keep talkin' 'bout it
you're liable to give the game away
instincts walk around it
and trip on every single word you say

you go
off with others so often
and I'm
left to carry this burden
as you go

so don't keep talkin' 'bout it
you're liable to give the game away
instincts are reminded
of each and every single word you say

you don't
know the feeling we're missing
and I'm
longing forever to kiss you
but you won't

well now don't keep talkin' 'bout it
you're fucking with me all these games you play
thought I ought to try it
but my love just doesn't work that way
don't keep talkin' 'bout it
it's mine alone they're not your words to say
instincts don't deny it
I need to shut you out and sell my ways...
"this one, anytime I say love if you wanna say love, uh, say it, and if you say it you might as well say it loud, and if you don't feel like sayin' it, don't say it, but if you feel it, certainly say it..."

NOTE: Everything I write in the P,P&M section are intended to be songs, not poetry.
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Comments

  • justamjustam Posts: 21,410
    This one is well done. :)

    It looks like a Rondo. Should the last eight lines be divided into two groups of four?
    &&&&&&&&&&&&&&
  • kerri_luckerkerri_lucker Posts: 5
    wow! that made me very sad to read. i have such an unsettling feeling in my tummy. i've been through a lot and feel as if i can relate. i just want you to know that if ya ever need someone to talk to. I WLL BE HERE FOR YOU ANYTIME,... IF YOU PM ME I WILL GIVE CELL# & HOME# FOR TIMES U MAY NEED SOMEONE TO TALK TO.
  • PerceptualPerceptual Posts: 200
    Thanks all... Um... I don't know what a Rondo is.
    Keep in mind that I know nothing about poetry and that these aren't poems. They're songs. The four line blocks are the chorus. I'm sure all these songs will change a little over time as I refine them too.

    And kerri_lucker, I'd be happy to PM you, and I will, if only to make a new friend, but I think offering to give out your cell phone number and home number is a little strange. It's the sorta thing you offer later when there is some trust built after talking for a while.
    "this one, anytime I say love if you wanna say love, uh, say it, and if you say it you might as well say it loud, and if you don't feel like sayin' it, don't say it, but if you feel it, certainly say it..."

    NOTE: Everything I write in the P,P&M section are intended to be songs, not poetry.
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