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TrixieCat

your presence wakes me
but only in a cold, lonely bed
for I lie here alone

eyedclaar

You are damn close to a haiku. It is so short you might just try to hammer out the syllable count...

TrixieCat

eyedclaar wrote:

You are damn close to a haiku. It is so short you might just try to hammer out the syllable count...

shoot...you are right.
I typed out the first draft...not the re-write.
It was meant to be haiku...:o

I wake to want you
but in a cold, lonely bed
for I lie alone

catefrances

TrixieCat wrote:

I wake to want you
but in a cold, lonely bed
for I lie alone

cause im not one for haikus, i had to read this several times before i got it straight in my head. i like it.