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lalalalaaaaaaaa
lalalalaaaaaaaa Posts: 2,445
edited August 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
She loves her slaves.
She digs their graves
down deep into the sun.

And they can’t fight
her song tonight,
as she’s already won.

The night sky rips,
and rough fingertips
reveal the brutal glow.

Ecstatic moans
he used to own
now let the envy flow.
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  • Holey Ghost
    Holey Ghost Posts: 744
    Ouch!! a thought comes to mind..."Evil Woman!"

    Nicely done tho'!
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  • lalalalaaaaaaaa
    lalalalaaaaaaaa Posts: 2,445
    Holey Ghost wrote:
    Ouch!! a thought comes to mind..."Evil Woman!"

    Nicely done tho'!

    Thanks for reading it. I think the evil in this situation is jealousy and insecurity...perhaps not brought on by the woman.
  • Holey Ghost
    Holey Ghost Posts: 744
    Nice instrospection then....jealousy can be a killer, insecurity can be chiller
    Create Good Things........
    Graduate of the School for Sexual Gifted....magna cum loads
  • Astral Star
    Astral Star Posts: 129
    Luv this one. Especially "Digs their graves down deep in the sun" It is such an interesting line. Burying someone in sheer light energy or fire. Hmmm lots to contemplate - thanks!
    "If we have no peace, it is because we have forgotten that we belong to eachother." Mother Theresa
  • lalalalaaaaaaaa
    lalalalaaaaaaaa Posts: 2,445
    Thanks Astral Star!
  • depopulationINC
    depopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    Saturnal wrote:
    She loves her slaves.
    She digs their graves
    down deep into the sun.

    And they can’t fight
    her song tonight,
    as she’s already won.

    The night sky rips,
    and rough fingertips
    reveal the brutal glow.

    Ecstatic moans
    he used to own
    now let the envy flow.


    hey, nice one...original stuff there. goodun
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key

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