The Response

KarasKaras Posts: 68
edited November 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
THE RESPONSE**

i walked into a room filled with nothing but a chair
and my shivers brought upon by the cold crisp air-
warmer than heaven yet colder than hell
reminding me of the ocean swells
in late march when I was with my love...

As i stepped in I stood and stared
my naked body cold and bare
i found no warming touch to greet me
only this one chair tucked away so neatly
Sanitary this felt in a lunitics mind
free from the bustle of the grind
she called home from day to day
and what forced her to say what she would say
in late march when i was with my love...

so slowly i walked along the line
knowing exactly what i would find
a hideaway for me to sit
in a corner somewhere my mind would split
away from the conforming of the other side
only my own laws would i now abide
for from each day that she lied
my slumber was flooded as i cried
in late march when i was with my love...

All alone i am free to roam
in this room i now call home
for it is mine, as am I
now only when i want to do I cry
as i shiver in this cold crisp air
allowing my body to cover with hair
warming me like your touch
a kiss from your lips i adore so much
a new sun is rising after the old had set
my warm rivers making you wet
like a grassy field's endless flowers
after a long day of showers
in early april when i am with my new love...
I scream in affirmation
of connecting dislocations
and exceeding limitations
by achieving levitation
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  • DavanitaDavanita Posts: 854
    sad.. very insightful. i like it :)
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  • KarasKaras Posts: 68
    thanks Davanita,

    I guess it is sad, though i think it was my attempt of expressing a real situation of moving on after someone you love leaves you...And I think that is positive, though I think the writing is Dark and lonely. But more so in a Vitalogy kind of way, in that it is darkness, loneliness, and Strength, as I am I, and I am mine (throw in a little Riot Act)...
    I scream in affirmation
    of connecting dislocations
    and exceeding limitations
    by achieving levitation
  • DavanitaDavanita Posts: 854
    i can relate to that..
    i guess it's kind of my style (in writing) as well. many of my own poems are perceived as gloomy and 'down' but i don't feel that's what they represent.
    guess that's just the way they come out.
    makes for some good poetry anyway ;)
    Jon Stewart: "[about Russia's new president]...Dmitri Medevvvevv.... Dmitri Meh..... Dmitri M.! Or... as George W. Bush would probably pronounce it... Eddie Vedder."
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