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Contrary

karma defectkarma defect Posts: 5,483
edited March 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
While she dances in the red of evening glamour,
softly fading towards a fragile end,
you cover your face to hide what was already hard to see.
No diamond drops, no fear, no sun to share.
The mystic grey that bonds black to white fades rapidly.
Prepare for the clash, no subtlety or nuance.


Darren
« One man's glory is another man's hell.
You’re on the outside, never bound by such a spell.
Together in the darkness, alone in the light.
I took it upon me to be yours, Timmy,
I’ll lead your angels and demons at play tonight......»
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Very nice! I feel a sadness in this one and the contrary-ness (yes, I know, not a word but it came out that way and it best describes what I wanted to say, I suppose :D)...very good, karma defect. :) The reds fading....the black and white of the mystic grey fading....hmmm, are they fading into eachother, I wonder? :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • karma defectkarma defect Posts: 5,483
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Very nice! I feel a sadness in this one and the contrary-ness (yes, I know, not a word but it came out that way and it best describes what I wanted to say, I suppose :D)...very good, karma defect. :) The reds fading....the black and white of the mystic grey fading....hmmm, are they fading into eachother, I wonder? :)

    First off. Thank u for replying, your too kind "Being". I'm glade you liked it.
    underneath is a little explanation (turned out being not so little, hihihi it's even longer then the poem itself).


    Close to my house was a lake were I used to go, preferable at sunset.
    The she character would be the wind,
    on one of the last days of summer.
    There's always that double feeling at the end of summer.
    Black and white is for two opposites. Grey meaning the ability to compromise.
    Back then I had a kinda love/hate friendship with someone.
    I guess you'd be picking onto that vibe.
    Anyway he was in trouble, I couldn't help, he was a closed person, I'm pretty open.
    The contrary is in all the things, my feelings; good moment watching the wind and the sand, the lake and the sun in contrary to that day being one of the last.
    the whole love/hate thing. Day fading into night. Seeing him in trouble and not being able to help.
    the clash, Him Vs. Me, Day Vs. Night.

    thanx being enlightend good karma 4 U.
    « One man's glory is another man's hell.
    You’re on the outside, never bound by such a spell.
    Together in the darkness, alone in the light.
    I took it upon me to be yours, Timmy,
    I’ll lead your angels and demons at play tonight......»
  • karma defectkarma defect Posts: 5,483
    Contrary-ness should be a word from now on, I claim that it is so.
    « One man's glory is another man's hell.
    You’re on the outside, never bound by such a spell.
    Together in the darkness, alone in the light.
    I took it upon me to be yours, Timmy,
    I’ll lead your angels and demons at play tonight......»
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    karma defect wrote:
    Contrary-ness should be a word from now on, I claim that it is so.

    :D:D

    Baroness, Baroness
    quite contrary-ness.
    How does your garden grow? :D Hee Hee!

    Sometimes made up words just make more sense. ;) Thank you for the breakdown of your poem. I'm glad I wasn't way off base, as I sometimes am. :) I live right by a lake and sunset is a most gorgeous time of day...paints the sky alive! :) Wish I was there now, that's for sure.

    And thank you for the good karma, karma defect! :) Right back atcha, 10 fold!!!! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
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