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Blue Summer Eyes

Nothingman54Nothingman54 Posts: 2,251
edited March 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Im drowning in the ocean of your blue summer eyes
Caught by the current
It took me by surprise
Draging, tugging and pulling me down
I cant fight back
Its got me now
But thats ok
I dont mind
Drowning in the ocean of your blue summer eyes
I'll be back
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  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    you could expand this to make a very good song
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • AnonAnon Posts: 11,175
    pretty, i like it
  • Nothingman54Nothingman54 Posts: 2,251
    I thought about expanding it to make it longer...... I may do that
    I'll be back
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    :) Very nice! I actually like it as a short poem. It seems off the cuff--I can picture you, locking eyes with this gal for just a few beautiful moments and this is exactly how it felt. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • Nothingman54Nothingman54 Posts: 2,251
    Thank you!
    I'll be back
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