burn the spring partial

walkerlastgen1walkerlastgen1 Posts: 155
edited February 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
As the summer days get hotter
it doesn't seem to bother (you)
we'll take it a little farther
burn the spring away

With all the money lies can make
lives are floating in the wake
how the future makes me shake
from the inside out

storms aren't getting any softer
wlecome mother nature's vengeful slaughter
like a father protects his daughter
we're just in the way.
I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

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  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i like...

    you could cut either "vengeful" or "slaughter" cuz it kills the rhythm
    but it's nice and obscure... would make good song lyrics


    :)
  • Very cool--I like your rhyme scheme! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • PastaNazi wrote:
    i like...

    you could cut either "vengeful" or "slaughter" cuz it kills the rhythm
    but it's nice and obscure... would make good song lyrics


    :)
    thanks for the compliment. They are song lyrics. And good advice but I took Welcome out instead.
    I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

    www.myspace.com/lastgeneration56
  • on piano

    cmaj
    as the summer days get hotter

    Am
    it doesn't seem to bother

    fmaj
    we'll take it a little farther


    gmaj
    burn the spring a- way

    maybe that will shed some light for those of you who play until i can get the songs uploaded for critique
    I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

    www.myspace.com/lastgeneration56
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    thanks for the compliment. They are song lyrics. And good advice but I took Welcome out instead.


    teehee... it was misspelt, anyway :D:D:D:D
  • no it wasn't uhh....it ....was my ....uh artistic presentation of the word.
    I DO NOT MIPSELL WERDS!!!!!
    I took a walk so I could curse my ass for being dumb!!!

    www.myspace.com/lastgeneration56
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