what about me

justdanno
justdanno Posts: 24
edited April 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
I've been educated
In oppression
I've suffered
Indiffernce of double standards

Why should I speak out
To make others believe i care
when all I see is insecutity

But I still believe
that life is sacrad
I believe in,
the freedom if choice

We've been educated
to see black or white
but i ask
where the gray

Why should I take a stand
for I see poth points
Humanity is the only thing missing

Hearing is different,
then listening,
with conflicting values
extreme beleifs become the norm
thats why I stay silent
queitly taking mental notes
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  • justdanno
    justdanno Posts: 24
    I was wondering what people thought of this poem, i was thinking about rewriting some of it. what do you guy think?
  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    justdanno wrote:
    I was wondering what people thought of this poem, i was thinking about rewriting some of it. what do you guy think?

    :) Edit for spelling, grammatical errors and such and it'll be good. The meaning behind the words comes across just fine and I like it, but tidy it up a bit and it'll be much better. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • justdanno
    justdanno Posts: 24
    Thanks for the input, I work on the spelling.
  • Being Enlightened
    Being Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    You're welcome, justdanno. :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen

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