me and you

bigbill
bigbill Posts: 42
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
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  • twin1
    twin1 Posts: 902
    bigbill wrote:
    when you have needs
    that never seem to be pleased
    could it just be me
    that i am a bad seed
    you see the world in a different way
    alway wondering why you stay
    but i also couldn't see it any other way
    love is strange people say
    but we count on love everyday
    love is the greatest thing
    why lose it over having a fling

    O.k. so far you have not been bashed. I guess I will start. Should add "selfish" to the needs part. Pretty straight forward poem - whining about supposed greener pastures. By the septic tank also has lovely green grass as well. I do think you hit on something about love being the greatest thing and not loosing it over having a fling, good love is under rated. I AM impressed that it rhymes...I will give you that.
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!

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