Tupelo- Please Critique

Meine liebe

I am working on a song and would love any input. Dont worry about hurting my feelings.....Be advised, the narrator is Southern and he doesnt care about grammar.....so I dont either. Thanks for reading......

-TUPELO-

Havent thought of it in years
Used to think of it everyday
It popped into my head again
And now it wont go away

I still dont regret it now
Clax was wrong for what he done
No telling for how long
It would have been going on

Clax had some land
Over the hill behind the school
Had a Mustang he fixed up
All the kids thought he was cool

One day after school
Couldnt find my sister Jill
I asked her friend where she went
She nodded towards the hill

I still see his face
I still see her face
Like it was here and now
Not another time and place

I saw Jill's bag by a tree
At the bottom of the hill
Peeked under a weeping willow
Found Clax on top of Jill

I grabbed a big ole rock
Before he knew that I was there
Caught him good and he went limp
And blood was everywhere

Jill was screaming at me
I just kept beating his head
Made sure he'd never touch her again
I made sure that he was dead

Oh, what he's done to her
And what it's done to me
A little girl in Tupelo
Under a weeping willow tree

And I still see his face
And I still see her face
Just like it was here and now
Not another time and place