The victim way

Ana ClaudiaAna Claudia Posts: 23
edited January 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
(Sorry about my English, is not my first language, ok?)

The torrent cames strong
washes all the asphalt
the street continues like victim,
pleasant
wishes that be a girl,
proud of melancholy
benefit from and
in that, find my happiness,
sip the water bit by bit,
leave the happiness of the sadness
with me!
It is no use to clean the obstacles,
in such a way that,
it always cames,
from the torrential river of my life.
Ana
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  • ladygooddivaladygooddiva Posts: 4,169
    wow that´s amazing;)
  • Thanks, I'm happy because I could to be communicate, in spite of english is not my language.
    Ana
  • I wrote, after I never be sure if I wrote right...
    Ana
  • ladygooddivaladygooddiva Posts: 4,169
    Thanks, I'm happy because I could to be communicate, in spite of english is not my language.


    i saw that but hey my english is also not well but they understand me here so don´t be shy to post here;)
  • ladygooddivaladygooddiva Posts: 4,169
    I wrote, after I never be sure if I wrote right...

    just try out;)
  • Tks ladygooddiva, I'll keep trying.
    Ana
  • ladygooddivaladygooddiva Posts: 4,169
    Tks ladygooddiva, I'll keep trying.

    you´re welcome;)
  • i saw that but hey my english is also not well but they understand me here so don´t be shy to post here;)

    Listen to the lady, she knows what she's talking about! :) Another good poem, Ana Banana!!!! (I called you Ana Banana because it rhymes :) ).
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • It is one of my nicknames... call me like you want, in Brasil a lot of people call me like that. Thanks for the read. Now I'm felling like home, tks for the incentive.
    Ana
  • wow.

    I saw when you posted "Latin Given Vent," and now this. I will have to go see what other jems you have posted.

    keep it up

    :)
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    Good read! ....Anna Banana :):)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
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