Time to think

AfternoonDelight

Donno if im any good at this poetry lark, but it looks like immense fun so ill give it a go-

All I need is room to wander,
room to breathe,
and room to ponder,

Time for me,
time from you,
time for me to think this through,

This descision,
You'll have me make,
Will take more time than time could take,

It's even harder now,
As time has gone by,
I'll give this choice just one more try,

Impossible, I can't decide,
This problem now,
is too big to hide,

Done. Finished.
My choice is made,
I fear now i've made a big mistake


...This is about how descisions, or problems no matter how big or small should be fixed sooner rather than later, because more often than not the problem with just escalate until its seems as though there is no right way out of it.

A bit like the old cliche " a stitch in time, saves nine"

Honest opinions please, if its no good, please tell me

btw take into concideration its my first EVER poem

kind of made up on the spot

justam

I like your explanation of it's meaning. But I'm not sure I would have gotten that from the poem!

AfternoonDelight

ah maybe not, in future attempts ill try bring my general point more to the fore, instead of trying to make it rhyme a little lol

justam

AfternoonDelight wrote:

ah maybe not, in future attempts ill try bring my general point more to the fore, instead of trying to make it rhyme a little lol

I have trouble keeping the meaning and making it rhyme too.

twin2

I thought it was good. Nice work.

AfternoonDelight

Thank you.

Childrens Hour

AfternoonDelight wrote:

This descision,
You'll have me make,
Will take more time than time could take,

I really like that last line..:)