Some lyrics....
Cropduster49
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This world is madness.
For our thoughts and actions are as dry as the soil that which bares no fruit, and as pure as the serpents blood that which gives no life.
But the blood that gives us life.
The life that gives us choice.
Gives the choice to hold the hands of the fallen or the choice to hold our own.
And as we drift ever farther from our hearts, we abandon the light that once gleamed so brightly
And as we lose touch with love and compassion, the choice to shelter the forsaken becomes disremembered.
Mother the barren land, revive the soil that once bared life.
Purge the serpents blood from your veins and restore virtue within the heart.
Rally the dreamers and the faithful, for hope is not yet lost.
May the words from my tongue be cradled in the arms of wisdom, and may they not be drowned and forgotten.
Like it? Yes? No? Crappy?
I'm not really a writer, but I gave it a shot.
For our thoughts and actions are as dry as the soil that which bares no fruit, and as pure as the serpents blood that which gives no life.
But the blood that gives us life.
The life that gives us choice.
Gives the choice to hold the hands of the fallen or the choice to hold our own.
And as we drift ever farther from our hearts, we abandon the light that once gleamed so brightly
And as we lose touch with love and compassion, the choice to shelter the forsaken becomes disremembered.
Mother the barren land, revive the soil that once bared life.
Purge the serpents blood from your veins and restore virtue within the heart.
Rally the dreamers and the faithful, for hope is not yet lost.
May the words from my tongue be cradled in the arms of wisdom, and may they not be drowned and forgotten.
Like it? Yes? No? Crappy?
I'm not really a writer, but I gave it a shot.
YOU CAN'T BE NEUTRAL ON A MOVING TRAIN.
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Now, the only thing I'd lose is the word "that", in 2 instances and here's what I mean:
"For our thoughts and actions are as dry as the soil which bares no fruit, and as pure as the serpents blood which gives no life." --- lose the "that" and that line sounds much better, IMO.