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coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
edited February 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
When I was a young boy
my father told me
you know I think
you talk too much

so I shut my mouth and listened
tried not to hurt the one's I loved
as I heard them speak
as I heard them shout
at the one's I couldn't see
I lived my life in silence
protected by my memory

When I was older
my mother told me
you know I think
you watch too much

so I shut my eyes and listened
I found it didn't hurt so much
as I reached for them
I tried to speak to them
the one's I tried to be
I lived my life in silence
to deaf, to dumb, to blind to see

Now I'm a husband
my wife she told me
you know I think
you feel too much

so I hid my feelings deep within me
I tried to hurt the one's I loved
as my anger grew
so my madness grew
and I was all but gone away
I lived my life within my mind
numbed by those who couldn't stay

Now I'm a father
my son he told me
hey dad I think
you think too much

Now I'm a father
my son he told me
hey dad I think
you've lived too much

And as I turned away
I'm sure I heard him say
hey dad I want to do it
just like you

And when they ask me all these stupid questions
I'll say I did it
I did it
and I was true
Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
Leaving is for the answering machine.
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Comments

  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    wow .
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    ummm wow good or wow bad?
    Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
    Leaving is for the answering machine.
  • pacifierpacifier Posts: 1,009
    coachchris wrote:
    ummm wow good or wow bad?

    :) wow good.
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    Pheuff....thanks very much!!
    Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
    Leaving is for the answering machine.
  • oldermanolderman Posts: 1,765
    it is good. reminds me, thematically, of harry chapin's 'cat in the cradle'

    thanks for sharing!
    Down the street you can hear her scream youre a disgrace
    As she slams the door in his drunken face
    And now he stands outside
    And all the neighbours start to gossip and drool
    He cries oh, girl you must be mad,
    What happened to the sweet love you and me had?
    Against the door he leans and starts a scene,
    And his tears fall and burn the garden green
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    olderman wrote:
    it is good. reminds me, thematically, of harry chapin's 'cat in the cradle'

    thanks for sharing!

    hmm I see that now to

    goodun
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    This is a great poem...thanks for posting it! :)
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • catefrancescatefrances Posts: 29,003
    fuck man, that was brilliant. :)
    hear my name
    take a good look
    this could be the day
    hold my hand
    lie beside me
    i just need to say
  • eMMIeMMI Posts: 6,262
    oh my. :eek: this is really really good!
    very intense.
    very credible.
    very well written.

    I can almost see it all happen..


    thank you for sharing!
    "Don't be faint-hearted, I have a solution! We shall go and commandeer some small craft, then drift at leisure until we happen upon another ideal place for our waterside supper with riparian entertainments."
  • chrisw_30chrisw_30 Posts: 21
    excellent man! all i can say
    Carpe Diem Baby
  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    Thank you all so much for the nice reply's. For the first time ever, after this was written, I felt like I conveyed everything I wanted to say. Im really glad people enjoyed this one!!
    Adolescence in essence is all about trust.
    Leaving is for the answering machine.
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