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Passage of Love

monkaymonkay Posts: 40
edited November 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Send away your love
Knotted stomach
Lump in your throat

A tear rolls
Stinging your eye
A sigh

You can wait
For the return
Time?

Wait
Wait
Wait

Your love has burned
No return
Be strong

The Pain
All wounds heal
Feel

New love is born
Butterflies
Rose without a thorn
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  • chromiamchromiam Posts: 4,114
    That's a pretty moving poem monkay... I like it. Gets to the heart of feelings and makes me reflect on past experiences... thanks.
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  • monkaymonkay Posts: 40
    chromiam wrote:
    That's a pretty moving poem monkay... I like it. Gets to the heart of feelings and makes me reflect on past experiences... thanks.

    Thanks! Its funny! Its been a year since i seperated with a long term girlfriend. (9 years) Yet i still find I can reflect on the time like it was yesterday!!
    http://www.myspace.com/funkymonkay

    Please check out my bands website and give some of our song's a listen!!

    http://www.myspace.com/dekolta

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    Reading Festival 2006
    London Wembeley Arena 2007
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    I too like this one alot.
  • lovin kindlovin kind Posts: 268
    what more to say
    thanks to everyone who can read what i write without having to say something mean
  • chromiamchromiam Posts: 4,114
    sorry had to read it again.. amazing
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  • AliAli Posts: 2,621
    Rose without a thorn is a breath of fresh air....:)
    A whisper and a thrill
    A whisper and a chill
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  • coachchriscoachchris Kelowna, British Columbia, Canada Posts: 749
    New love is born
    Butterflies
    Rose without a thorn


    What a great capture of emotion....thank you.
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  • monkaymonkay Posts: 40
    Hey all, thanks for the feedback! Its good to hear positive things about things you write. I appreciate it, like Im sure everyone else on the list does!
    I love this list. So much talent and the ears are appreciative(sp?) which is nice!! Thanks again!!
    http://www.myspace.com/funkymonkay

    Please check out my bands website and give some of our song's a listen!!

    http://www.myspace.com/dekolta

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    Reading Festival 2006
    London Wembeley Arena 2007
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    monkay wrote:
    Send away your love
    Knotted stomach
    Lump in your throat

    A tear rolls
    Stinging your eye
    A sigh

    You can wait
    For the return
    Time?

    Wait
    Wait
    Wait

    Your love has burned
    No return
    Be strong

    The Pain
    All wounds heal
    Feel

    New love is born
    Butterflies
    Rose without a thorn


    You know, I like the way you've used space and repetition to reclaim cliche and remind us that sometimes only the most recognisable phrases express deepest feelings. I think that's what Bob Dylan did on Time Out Of Mind. Good stuff, Monkay.
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