Deeper Thinking

thunder_ballsthunder_balls Posts: 117
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH. I'm sorry..I just had to let that out. Erm, anyways.

Deeper Thinking:

sitting in my chair
there goes a strand of hair
won't look anywhere
because i will only see myself

i can't put down my shoulders
they just cannot be lowered
i just can't, without power..
and i see you
and i want, anything else

revive me please
or take me out of misery
im on my knees
and this feeling won't go, away..
and then it hits me

i am nothing
you are nothing
i wish

i feel something
it's always bumping
to get out of me
and into you

it's too impossible,
to pick up what has been downed.
but that sound,
the sound that i can only see,
makes it,
makes it, for me.

pay no attention to this
pay no attention to it at all
why are you looking?
what do you see?

is it you or me?
this can't be..
i've got your attention
only out of a reflection

think you.
what feeling is it saying?
when the skys aren't so blue
and neither are your veins.

Yeah..just got done writing that. Hmm. Even I don't understand it...
7/10/06
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Comments

  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    I think I love you, but I'm not really sure....heheheheheheheh.......but I guess it's amusing to think about for a minute or two
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    I really like the following lines:

    "I've got your attention
    only out of a reflection"

    It was an interesting one.
  • DopeBeastieDopeBeastie Posts: 2,513
    i think this writing really touches on Truth...

    (and the the rhymes aren't cliche'd,
    and there appears to be much thought with regard to word economy)

    i like it, a lot

    we are nothing, to be sure


    isn, i think i love him too... s'pecially with a name like thunderballs ;););)
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