MonkeyShine

trinityelizatrinityeliza Posts: 426
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Too many years have gone by now
Too much to be mistaken
I've filtered through your tricks of light
By time you've been foresaken
I know the world is your stage....
When is the curtain call???
Deceptive was your rise
Hardcore will be the fall

Once taken by the magic
A finely tuned distraction
Nothing much more to it
Forgive the shameles infraction
I her you laugh
Shudder at your smile
Grimace at your careless style
Looking on
I'm so inclined
To say "Farewell"
To U
MonkeyShine

Will you be able to find a way??
Will you save yourself while you still can???
Do you think you can come down from there?
Have you sketched a plan?
I don't know what
I wish for you...
My abhoration scares me so
Nearly side by side with you
Sinking down so low

Once taken by the magic
A finely tuned distraction
Nothing much more to it
Forgive the shameles infraction
I her you laugh
Shudder at your smile
Grimace at your careless style
Looking on
I'm so inclined
To say "Farewell"
To U
MonkeyShine
Put me in coach...I'm ready to
Fuck up...the USA...
Look at me...I can rig...
The presidency!!!!
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Comments

  • another good one.

    would you mind if i used this as my sig?:

    Once taken by the magic
    A finely tuned distraction
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • FinsburyParkCarrotsFinsburyParkCarrots Seattle, WA Posts: 12,223
    Are these song lyrics? They suggest musical form.
  • twin2twin2 Posts: 894
    Good one. It's very well written.
  • Yeh-I'm a musician, so most times I'm writing in song format and I don't even know it. I don't mind you using my words as a signature violet... I'm flattered!
    Still fine tuning the music on this one. It's coming along nicely though!!
    Thanks for the kind words. I don't mind the "critique"... I like to receive IM/Private Messages when someone has something lengthy to say. I love discussing the dynamics, emotions, song progressions, etc... feel free to send private notes ;)
    Put me in coach...I'm ready to
    Fuck up...the USA...
    Look at me...I can rig...
    The presidency!!!!
  • Nice poem, good song lyrics too.I just hope that the people reading this realize just exactly what you mean and to whom the type of people are that you sre describing
    BOW-WOW-WOW-YIPPIE YO YIPPIE YA
    BOW WOW WOW YIPPIE YO
    It's kinda hard in the L.B.C.
    When you're the SNOOP DO-GG!!!

    ME SAY"SHUGGY FO SHUGGY MY NOOGIE!!!!"-URBAN BOOGIE

    "REMEMBER KIDS LIVING IN TOTALITARIAN COMMUNES BREEDS DISSIDENCE"- POOPY BOOGIE'S TINKY
  • Nice poem, good song lyrics too.I just hope that the people reading this realize just exactly what you mean and to whom the type of people are that you sre describing

    Thanx... It's all open for interpretation.
    Put me in coach...I'm ready to
    Fuck up...the USA...
    Look at me...I can rig...
    The presidency!!!!
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