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I hurt

depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
edited October 2005 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
It hurts
It bleeds
Inside
Sometimes
I just
Ask why

I thought
I heard
It all
Yet here
I stand
In awe

It pains
My ears
To heed
A path
A trend
I weave

I watch
I learn
I see
The way
Its meant
To be

I stop
The ache
Within
A sigh
To cry
Begin
The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

And I won't make the same mistakes
(Because I know)
Because I know how much time that wastes
(And function)
Function is the key
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Comments

  • violet rayviolet ray Posts: 502
    *thumbs up*
    You ask me to enter
    But then You make me crawl
    And I can't be holding on
    To what You got
    When all You've got is hurt
    ----
    Underneath this smile lies everything
    All my hopes and anger, pride and shame
  • brain of cbrain of c Posts: 5,213
    have a slush puppy.

    that always helps.
    d'oh!!!!!!

    http://www.myspace.com/brain_of_c
  • ISNISN Posts: 1,700
    this is a well-articulated expression of profound emotions
    ....they're asking me to prove why I should be allowed to stay with my baby in Australia, because I'm mentally ill......and they think I should leave......
  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    I liked how you placed the words, it's punchy and to me, that was effective because of the emotion in the words. I love how you ended with "begin"--that was perfect, my fellow hoser :p and liker of the uber sensational band The Police! :D
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • ^rubyinthedust^^rubyinthedust^ Posts: 53
    This piece is beautiful...

    I have read some of your other writings here as well... vivid... comes to mind... very nice indeed.

    Thank you for sharing...
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    hey, thanks all. I really appreciate the replies. They are Uber (that had to be thrown in for B.E.)

    ^rubyinthedust^, I dont think I have seen you around these parts, if I am mistaken I appollogize, if I am correct, welcome aboard!

    I kind of spit this one out and think I have figured out what it means to me. I am not 100% sure I totally get it yet, but I was in a strange mood when I wrote it, and know it does means something imparticular to myself. I think that this poem has help me put to rest a few things that have been nagging on me lately. Odd.

    anyways, I am rambling, sorry, and thanks again.

    peace out,
    Uber Hoser
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • Righteous JammerRighteous Jammer Posts: 509
    I read this poem about 5 times.. I loved it!!!!
    It doesnt hurt.... when I bleed
    but memories...they eat me
    I've seen it all before,...
    bring it on cause I'm no victim.
    -Ghost
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    thanks poet, I appreciate that
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
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