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Big Tip

depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
edited August 2006 in Poetry, Prose, Music & Art
Little waist and a smile on the face
Bringing what I need
Even though it’s her time to bleed
Walking by
A flirting rub
Gentle wink
Knowing what I’m think of
Living for a dollar
Something to pay the rent
By the time she buys those clothes for work
Paycheck is already spent
Working for the summer
To fund a dreamful life
Living with a scumbag
Keeps her reality on the brink
The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

And I won't make the same mistakes
(Because I know)
Because I know how much time that wastes
(And function)
Function is the key
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  • justamjustam Posts: 21,412
    Hmmm...

    This is well written.
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  • Being EnlightenedBeing Enlightened Posts: 5,746
    Barmaid? Bring me a whiskey--another round of beer.
    Let's say we cut and run, babe. Let's get on outta here. ;)

    I like how you were rhyming but then decided to stop at the end--it actually really drove the fact that she was living with a scumbag home all the more, I found. Like a slap in the face.

    Goodun! :)
    Forget your perfect offering, there is a crack in everything, that's how the light gets in. - Leonard Cohen
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    Being Enlightened wrote:
    Barmaid? Bring me a whiskey--another round of beer.
    Let's say we cut and run, babe. Let's get on outta here. ;)

    I like how you were rhyming but then decided to stop at the end--it actually really drove the fact that she was living with a scumbag home all the more, I found. Like a slap in the face.

    Goodun! :)

    thanks justam and Be

    I am very pleased somebody picked up on that

    thanks
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    Sad that is the reality of many out there...easy to look around and see there are many in similar boats, good read depop
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
  • depopulationINCdepopulationINC Posts: 2,074
    I was originally going to call it 'Big Tits'

    but I have other plans for that one!

    :)
    The only thing I enjoy is having no feelings....being numb rocks!

    And I won't make the same mistakes
    (Because I know)
    Because I know how much time that wastes
    (And function)
    Function is the key
  • twin1twin1 Posts: 902
    depopulationINC wrote:
    I was originally going to call it 'Big Tits'

    but I have other plans for that one!

    :)


    charming...
    Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
    No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
    After you die...you know how to LIVE!
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