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twin1
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Who stands up for them,
the ones who are broken down,
who tells them they are loved,
the ones who don't know how,
Tell me I don't understand,
how can I smile when it is all wrong,
perhaps I don't know a thing,
you have to be tough and prideful to be strong,
When you shunned your neighbor,
because you did not understand,
how do you know you didn't give up,
on the most loyalest of friends,
It is weak to come in peace, that is what I've heard,
it's not our business, why should we care,
no one makes a difference in this world,
Their color is different, their beliefs are not ours,
the education is lacking, they have too many scars,
so what is your excuse, we can all drum up some,
do you choose to stand for right...even if the only one?
Who comes with spotless records,
that doesn't have a list of faults,
who hasn't done some regretable things,
making choices from emotional thoughts,
I don't think I need a degree to show me where I'm wrong,
or to take a rageful stance to show my conviction is strong,
Yeah I've heard what's healthy, what is acceptable, what's "true",
I have heard you do not care about what I say or do,
That is all o.k. with me, I don't need you to believe,
the only thing I want you to understand is that love will set you free...
the ones who are broken down,
who tells them they are loved,
the ones who don't know how,
Tell me I don't understand,
how can I smile when it is all wrong,
perhaps I don't know a thing,
you have to be tough and prideful to be strong,
When you shunned your neighbor,
because you did not understand,
how do you know you didn't give up,
on the most loyalest of friends,
It is weak to come in peace, that is what I've heard,
it's not our business, why should we care,
no one makes a difference in this world,
Their color is different, their beliefs are not ours,
the education is lacking, they have too many scars,
so what is your excuse, we can all drum up some,
do you choose to stand for right...even if the only one?
Who comes with spotless records,
that doesn't have a list of faults,
who hasn't done some regretable things,
making choices from emotional thoughts,
I don't think I need a degree to show me where I'm wrong,
or to take a rageful stance to show my conviction is strong,
Yeah I've heard what's healthy, what is acceptable, what's "true",
I have heard you do not care about what I say or do,
That is all o.k. with me, I don't need you to believe,
the only thing I want you to understand is that love will set you free...
Our love must not be just words, but True Love, which shows itself in action,
No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
After you die...you know how to LIVE!
No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
After you die...you know how to LIVE!
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the education is lacking, they have too many scars,
so what is your excuse, we can all drum up some,
do you choose to stand for right...even if the only one?
I really like this part, but i think your poem would really benefit if your lines were shorter. I'll give you the advice someone once gace me, try to say what your saying in three words or less, and don't come right out and say what you want to say, make it more mysterious. Make the reader really think about what your saying. Other wise good, you show promise keep writing.
No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
After you die...you know how to LIVE!
Thanks!
No one needs a smile more than someone who fails to give one,
After you die...you know how to LIVE!
Dang dang Mz P-man
And I won't make the same mistakes
(Because I know)
Because I know how much time that wastes
(And function)
Function is the key
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