2nd poem "Something"
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This is the 2nd poem i wrote. Please comment on this even if you think it sucks tell me why it sucks. I just want any feedback since i just started writing.
"Something"
Dear Friend
There's something I need to tell you
Something that I can no longer push aside
Feelings of something I had to hide
because I feared somethings would change
But I finally have looked past my fears.
So as I look into your heart through your soft golden eyes
I know this is going to be hard and take you by surprise
But I am willing to risk everything we have
With these few words from deep in my heart
Promise me you won't walk away
but there's something I need to say: I love you.
"Something"
Dear Friend
There's something I need to tell you
Something that I can no longer push aside
Feelings of something I had to hide
because I feared somethings would change
But I finally have looked past my fears.
So as I look into your heart through your soft golden eyes
I know this is going to be hard and take you by surprise
But I am willing to risk everything we have
With these few words from deep in my heart
Promise me you won't walk away
but there's something I need to say: I love you.
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Rather than being birthed like a normal child, Chuck Norris instead
decided to punch his way out of his mother's womb. Shortly thereafter
he grew a beard.
Member # 0004
Rather than being birthed like a normal child, Chuck Norris instead
decided to punch his way out of his mother's womb. Shortly thereafter
he grew a beard.
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Member # 0004
Rather than being birthed like a normal child, Chuck Norris instead
decided to punch his way out of his mother's womb. Shortly thereafter
he grew a beard.
and why
because god made us